Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In many countries in the whole world, urbanization is increasing day by day by which the population in the rural side is declining. I believe, although moving to cities allows people several advantages, it is a negative development.

On the one hand, city life provides individuals numerous avantages. One of the most obvious advantages is the job opportunity. People move to urban areas in search of work due to the less availability of jobs in the countryside. In addition, people get the chance to live a better life as they get all the facilities such as education, healthcare, transportation, and accomodation. For instance, there are no advanced hospitals in the villages, thus, when rural people had to go through a emergency cases, they need to move cities for better treatment. Therefore, many rural people now moving to cities.

However, it has many negative consequences. As the number of people shifts from villages to cities, it makes not only overcrowd the urban side but also decrease the population in the countryside. Cities gradually turning into concrete jungle as the increased population. People have to face challanges in getting job, increased accomodation cost, and increased traffic congestion. While, moving from contryside, damages the natural beauty as these sides remain without care.

In my opinion, moving to cities is a negative development. Although it provides benefits to people, it makes cities overcrowded and damages the countryside's beauty. To prevent this situation, the Governmant should take necessary steps to provide all the facilities to the rural people. If all the necessary infrastructures are made in the countryside, rural people will less tend to shift cities.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear from the introduction—“it is a negative development”—and remains consistent in the conclusion. You address both sides by explaining why people move for work and services, then describing overcrowding and harm to rural areas. These are relevant reasons, and the hospital example helps illustrate the lack of rural healthcare. However, some points are asserted rather than fully explained: for example, the effect of a declining countryside population on rural communities is not developed, and “damages the natural beauty” needs a clearer explanation of how this happens. To strengthen the response, extend each main reason with a specific consequence or example and make the link between rural migration and its wider effects more precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph presenting advantages, a paragraph explaining disadvantages, and a conclusion that restates your view and proposes a solution. The progression from reasons for migration to its consequences is easy to follow, and signposts such as “On the one hand,” “However,” and “In my opinion” help guide the reader. At times, though, connections are mechanical or unclear. “Therefore, many rural people now moving to cities” repeats the preceding point without adding a clear link, while “While, moving from countryside” begins an awkward, incomplete contrast. Improve cohesion by using complete transitions and clearer references, and ensure each paragraph develops one connected line of reasoning.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of vocabulary, including “urbanization,” “overcrowded,” “traffic congestion,” and “infrastructures,” which allows you to discuss the topic clearly. There are also attempts at more descriptive language, such as “concrete jungle.” However, noticeable spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision: “avantages,” “accomodation,” “challanges,” and “Governmant” are misspelled, while “rural side” and “increased accommodation cost” are unnatural or imprecise combinations. Some wording is also repetitive, particularly “facilities” and “cities.” Work on accurate spelling and natural collocations, and choose terms that express the intended idea precisely. This would make your vocabulary more flexible and reliable.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex structures, including a concession in “although moving to cities allows people several advantages” and a conditional proposal beginning “If all the necessary infrastructures are made…”. The overall meaning is generally understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “Cities gradually turning” needs a finite verb, and “many rural people now moving” also lacks an auxiliary. The construction “it makes not only overcrowd the urban side but also decrease” is not grammatically parallel, and “when rural people had to go through a emergency cases” has problems with tense, article use, and number. Aim to form complete clauses, check subject–verb patterns, and use parallel structures when listing consequences.

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