Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

all around the world mostlly people were moving from rural areas to cities cause those areas dont have much facilites as compare to citeies like big hospitals,banks,schools,government organizations and many more.

lack of facilits,lead them to move from rural area towards cities cause they have so many oppertunites of work their health care facilites safety security ,education ,many more.

this thing have both positive or negative impact as well cause city life is way too expensive like living cost ,bills,grocery,rents,educations, this needs a lot of many and managing this much expense for a single job persoon s way too difficult

on the other hand rural areas are not much develop so living expense decreses cause in village everyboad have their own farms of fruit vegetables grains etc.they dont need to buy expensive grocery their life depended on natural resources .they dont have to pay high bills or secturity fees.

for example rural areas are quite small so the expanse is very low and living cost is manageable this can be a positive sign for the people of rural areas

on the other side city life is so hectic busy expensive needs a lot of energy sources over work loads part time jobs and many more.

in my opionion boths sides have postive and negative impact city life is busy hard to manage the work load morever village life is quite simple peacefull and less expensive.

in conclusion moving from rural areas to cities does not have neagative impact

or population of countryside will be increasubg likely people of rural areas experince

different lifestyle seeks for new jobs culturelearning new oppertunties.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify relevant reasons for rural-to-urban migration, including access to hospitals, schools, jobs and education, and you also mention the higher costs of city life. However, the task asks you to decide whether this is positive or negative, and your position remains unclear: you say it has “both positive or negative impact” and later conclude that it “does not have neagative impact,” without explaining which side you ultimately support. Several points, such as rural self-sufficiency and city expenses, are introduced but not developed with clear explanation or a specific example. To strengthen the response, state a definite overall judgement in the introduction and conclusion, then explain how your examples support that judgement.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response contains a recognisable sequence of ideas: reasons people move, disadvantages of city life, benefits of rural life, and a concluding comment. You also attempt to signal contrasts with phrases such as “on the other hand” and “on the other side.” However, the ideas are not arranged into clear paragraphs, and the progression is difficult to follow because several points are joined in long, loosely connected strings. The conclusion introduces a confusing idea about the countryside population increasing, which does not clearly follow from the discussion. Organise the essay into an introduction, focused body paragraphs and a conclusion, with each paragraph developing one main point and clear links between them.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “rural areas,” “living cost,” “health care,” “natural resources” and “opportunities of work,” so the reader can identify the main topic and ideas. However, the range is limited and several expressions are repetitive or imprecise, such as “many more,” “this thing” and “city life is so hectic busy.” Frequent spelling errors, including “facilites,” “oppertunites” and “neagative,” also make the writing less clear. Some combinations are not natural in English, for example “opportunities of work” and “needs a lot of energy sources.” Build a more accurate range of collocations and check spelling, while choosing precise words for each point.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect ideas using clauses and contrast, as in “this thing have both positive or negative impact as well cause city life is way too expensive,” but sentence structures are limited and these longer attempts are often difficult to follow. Errors occur frequently in verb forms and agreement (“this thing have,” “their life depended”), articles and plurals, and sentence boundaries. For example, several ideas are joined with commas or run together without clear punctuation, while the final sentence is incomplete and hard to interpret. Practise writing accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “because,” “although” and “while.” Check subject–verb agreement and punctuation when editing.

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