Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In recent years, a major shift has been seen in migration of people from villages to the advanced cities around the world. I believe that this is a positive development because a significant number of people are getting jobs and employment oppurtunities in central metropolitan cities.

On top of that, one primary reason of this development is that individuals in backword areas cannot get enough chances to explore their work and job relating prospects. For instance, a commute worker who has spent his whole life in village and cannot get enough experience to work in an international firm or a company. As a result, there is far less chances of his promotion in that company. In addition, rural life is often lacks of public amenities such as public parks, healthcare infrastructure, and entertainment facilities. Moreover, educational network systems are not fully developed in villages; ultimately, villagers children move to major cities where this facility is available.

Admittedly, village life also provides significant number of benefits including better air quality and mental peace which are hard to find in big cities. In villages, the environmental population is almost invisible. While in cities, this si the most prominent and arising concern in today's world. In addition, it is possible that you can witness the stars and has a chance to sky the clear sky.

To sum up all the arguments, it is true that the village life is more calm and peacefull, but in mega cities employers have a chance to boots their work and find the job which is suitable for them

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you consider rural-to-urban migration positive, mainly because cities offer more employment and educational opportunities. You also acknowledge counterarguments, including cleaner air and greater peace in villages, so the response addresses both the judgement and relevant reasons. However, some points are not fully explained. The example of a village worker’s prospects is difficult to follow, and the benefits of city employment are asserted more than demonstrated. The paragraph about village advantages is relevant, but its final point about seeing the sky is unclear and is not connected back to your overall evaluation. Develop fewer points with clearer explanations and specific examples, then make the conclusion state more directly why the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, supporting paragraphs, a concession, and a conclusion. Linking expressions such as “On top of that,” “For instance,” “Admittedly,” and “To sum up” help signal the direction of the argument. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes uneven. The example beginning “a commute worker” is not a complete sentence and its connection to the preceding claim is unclear. The shift from village amenities to education is understandable but could be organised more smoothly, while the paragraph on village life contains an unclear final sentence. The conclusion also ends abruptly. Use clearer topic sentences, connect each example explicitly to your claim, and ensure that references such as “this facility” have an unmistakable antecedent.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of topic-related vocabulary, including “migration,” “metropolitan cities,” “public amenities,” “healthcare infrastructure,” and “environmental” concerns. These choices show an effort to discuss employment, services, and quality of life beyond basic vocabulary. However, inaccurate spelling and word choice sometimes weaken clarity: “oppurtunities,” “backword,” “peacefull,” and “boots” appear, and phrases such as “environmental population” and “sky the clear sky” do not express the intended meaning naturally. Some combinations are also awkward, including “job relating prospects” and “educational network systems.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully; precise everyday wording is more effective than ambitious phrases used incorrectly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple statements and attempts at more complex structures, including “because” clauses and the contrast introduced by “While in cities.” This gives the response some variety, but control is inconsistent. For example, “rural life is often lacks” combines incompatible verb forms, and “a commute worker who has spent his whole life in village” is a fragment rather than a complete sentence. There are also errors in agreement and sentence construction in “there is far less chances” and “villagers children move.” The final sentence lacks a clear, complete structure. Practise building complete sentences around each main idea, checking subject–verb agreement, articles, and singular/plural forms, and punctuating contrast clauses so they connect correctly.

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