Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Many countries people are migrating from village side to cities for better opportunities. In my opinion, this indicate an imbalance in a country development and most of the development is focus in major cities rather than equally develop across the area.

People are moving from rural area to develped cities. This is because people are seeking for good roads, hospital, quality education, and major reason for searching jobs. For instance, finding a suitable job is hard in rural area, so many people move to majar cities for jobs and quality of life qualitiy. As a result,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You give a relevant position by saying that rural-to-urban migration reflects an imbalance in national development, and you identify reasons such as jobs, roads, hospitals and education. However, the response is incomplete: it does not clearly explain whether you consider the trend positive or negative, and the example about finding work is only briefly stated. The final sentence stops at “As a result,” leaving the point unfinished, and there is no discussion of consequences for rural communities or cities. The response is also 96 words, below the required 250, so there is not enough development to address the task adequately. State your judgement directly, then support it with developed reasons and relevant examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic sequence: you introduce migration and your view, then give reasons people leave rural areas and begin an example. The opening phrase “For instance” also signals that an example is coming. However, the response ends abruptly at “As a result,” so the explanation and overall progression are unfinished. The second paragraph combines several reasons in one sentence, making their relationships less clear, and there is no concluding paragraph to bring the argument together. Organise the response into an introduction, separate body paragraphs for your main points, and a conclusion. Use linking phrases to show how each example supports your position, rather than leaving connections implicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “migrating,” “opportunities,” “quality education,” and “suitable job,” so the main subject is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and some word choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “village side,” “seeking for,” and “quality of life qualitiy.” There are also spelling errors in “develped,” “majar,” and “qualitiy,” which reduce precision. Aim for more natural topic-specific expressions, such as “rural areas,” “seek,” and “employment opportunities,” and check spelling carefully. A wider range of accurate terms for the effects of migration would also help you explain your argument more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including “This is because people are seeking for good roads, hospital, quality education, and major reason for searching jobs.” The meaning is partly recoverable, but this sentence has problems with sentence structure and the way its list is formed. In “this indicate,” the verb does not agree with the singular subject, and “most of the development is focus” has an incorrect verb form. The response also contains incomplete punctuation and ends with a fragment, “As a result,”. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement and verb forms. More accurate control of these patterns would make your ideas easier to follow.

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