Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowdays , people want a good lifestyle such as food,house and transporstation vehicles for good standard of living. However individuals who live in rural areas does not have these kind of facilities , so they move to urban areas for increase their standard of living.However it does not affect in the population of countryside and decrease. for these perhaps i would like to share my opinion that rural people moves to cities , so it does not decrease the population in rural areas. In addition i will support these view with arguments in the following paragraphs.

Firstly , every indvidual needs a development in their life. In rural areas that not possible because there are lack of employement which is major factor. Similary in cities employment is avalaible so people can earn money for their needs and facilties . In rural areas lack of hospitals and medical shops while in city all kind of hospital services avalaible 24x7. However for living there are such kind of houses , ternaments , flats are avalaible with proper construction and with enough space similary in rural side houses are not proper consturcted. for taking better education city has several kind of schools and collleges for children and adults while in rural areas there is also lack of education which is stops the grwoth of people and does not broad the mind and perspectives.

Secondly , village natural air,healthy food and lifestyle can't replace with city. Big cities has no peace there are 24x7 people stuggles with their own problems and not having proper self-time and lack of purified air and healty good because lot of transpostation activies and chemicals included foods. However in rural areas these kind of facilties are worth for live longer and stay healty. However these things good for short period of time because in rural areas no kind of activity and employment opportunities avalaible , But it does not decrease the population of rural areas. For instance individual who comes from rural area for work and good lifestyle after that in break time they go tonheir village for enjoy break time is called balance between both rural and urban areas.

To conclude , rural area lifestyle is good however it does not give good standard of living like cities and because of this it not affect on rural areas populations.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a position, but it is difficult to identify and it does not consistently answer whether rural-to-urban migration is positive or negative. The introduction says that migration “does not affect in the population of countryside and decrease,” and the conclusion similarly claims it “does not affect on rural areas populations,” although the prompt states that the countryside population is decreasing. Your first body paragraph explains why people move—jobs, healthcare, housing and education—but does not clearly evaluate the development. The second paragraph presents benefits of rural life, yet the example of people returning to their villages during breaks does not establish that the population is not declining. To strengthen the response, state a clear positive or negative view and develop relevant reasons and examples that support that view directly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the use of “Firstly” and “Secondly” signals an attempt to organise ideas. However, progression is difficult to follow because the central position shifts or remains unclear, and several points are joined without a clear relationship. For example, the first body paragraph moves from employment to hospitals, housing and education in a long sequence, while the second shifts from rural benefits to city problems and then to the claim that migration does not reduce rural population. Connect each paragraph to one main argument and explain how its examples support your position. Some linking words, especially repeated uses of “However” and “similarly,” do not accurately show the relationship between ideas, so use them selectively and make references explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “employment,” “medical shops,” “education,” “purified air” and “employment opportunities,” which helps communicate the subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, sometimes making the reader work to understand the point. Examples include “good lifestyle,” “transportation vehicles,” “chemicals included foods” and “worth for live longer.” Spelling errors such as “Nowdays,” “employement” and “aval aible” also reduce accuracy. Build a more precise set of phrases for migration and rural services, and check spelling and natural word combinations. For instance, describe access to jobs or healthcare rather than relying on broad or awkward expressions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses with “because,” “while” and “which,” but complex sentences are often faulty and errors occur frequently enough to make some ideas difficult to follow. For example, “individuals who live in rural areas does not have” has a subject–verb agreement error, and “for increase their standard of living” uses an incorrect verb pattern. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also inconsistent: several sentences run together, while commas are often placed with spaces before them. There are also problems with articles, plurals and verb forms, as in “Big cities has” and “people moves.” Practise accurate subject–verb agreement and verb patterns, then divide long sequences into complete sentences and proofread punctuation.

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