Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, more and more individuals moving to many country around the world, this effects the population in the countryside is decreasing. I think this is a positive developments because one main reason are many people going their study and working time, while other some peolpe moving other country and cities they help for many facilities and also transport, school, water, hospital and also other many advantages of their country and cities.

Firstly, they are a positive development because more and more people going other county and cities their personal problems and also work their and some money send a family. For example, some individuals moving other cities they found esaly many jobs opportunities and also find out many work, their are a many facilities and earning lot of money also sarvive a many problems time. Cities are also give a many oppurtinitues for many peolpe, they provide a better education, hospital and each other, One main reason cities provide better transportation are many peolpe. For example, their are many public vacicals and also going many place to place they provide a lowest cost. However, some people comming cities and build a better lifestyle they also started a new jobs and companies this helps for people financial condation improved.

Secondly, individuals are moving to cities they are also disadvantages, one main point are population in the countryside is decreasing because, more and more people going cities and also living their and also countryside many undevelopments and also living their older people and also their many land are west. Population in the countryside going city and many reasion like study, work and also their many facilities, this is many negative effects new childern they not knowledge a oldest village and also not knowledge for historical items. For example, more and more people going cities side and not comming and living their village, they also choose for developments cities.

In conclusion, I believe that moving to cities are positive developments because they provided a many oppurtinitues and also their hospital, education, trasportasian and other many facitilies their, also life are good and many services. Moreover, living a countryside are also more important because they help a healthy lifestyle, clean places also their are a many historical places.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You state a clear overall view in the introduction and conclusion: you consider rural-to-urban migration positive because cities offer work, education, healthcare and transport. These are relevant reasons, and the examples about finding jobs and sending money to family help explain your position. However, the response addresses the question only partially because the second body paragraph shifts to disadvantages of rural depopulation without clearly explaining how these affect your overall judgement. The conclusion also briefly praises countryside life, leaving your position less consistent. Develop the consequences for rural communities more fully, then explain why your chosen side outweighs them. Specific examples, such as the effect on local services or farming, would make the argument more convincing and complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the use of “Firstly,” “Secondly” and “In conclusion” makes the basic structure visible. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow because several points are joined together without clear relationships. For example, the first body paragraph moves from jobs and remittances to transport, education and companies, while the second combines population decline, older residents, unused land and children’s knowledge of village history. Repeated use of “also” and “for example” does not always clarify how ideas connect, and references such as “they” and “their” can be unclear. Give each paragraph one main purpose and use shorter, clearly linked sentences to develop it.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “population,” “transportation,” “education,” “historical” and “lifestyle,” so the reader can identify the main subject and your intended arguments. However, the range is limited and many words or phrases are repeated, particularly “many,” “people,” “cities” and “also.” Frequent spelling errors and inaccurate word choices sometimes make meaning difficult to understand, as in “public vacicals,” “sarvive,” “west” for land, and “financial condation.” Several combinations are also unnatural, such as “a positive developments” and “found easily many jobs opportunities.” Build a bank of accurate topic collocations and check spelling and word forms. More precise vocabulary would help distinguish benefits to migrants from costs to rural communities.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with reasons and examples, including clauses beginning with “because” and “while.” This shows an effort to vary sentence structure. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence boundaries can make the argument hard to follow. For example, “more and more individuals moving” needs a finite verb, while “one main reason are” has incorrect agreement. In “Cities are also give,” the verb construction is incorrect, and several sentences run together with commas or capitals used inaccurately. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then add one subordinate clause at a time. Check singular/plural agreement and articles during revision.

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