Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In many parts of the world, village people are moving to urban palces , so the population the the countryside reducing. it has merits and demerits both. i will evaluate both views and also present my perspective .

On the one hand , people are coming to cities for better life and jobs . there are lots of companies office are situated in city area because all govt facilities are easily accesible in city . people comes from rural area work in this jobs help to grow the cities economy as well as the countries . when cities population rise significantly with that govt invest more in the infrastructure by build more roads ,metro , hospital and houses which eventually improve overall growth.

On the other hand , people come to the cities rapidely it make the palce more crowded which also created lots of problem for the city dwellers. because of overpopulation cities become more polluted . Roads , rivers , lanes become more dirty .sometimes overpopulation in the city create job shortage in the job market. unskilled and jobless people become burden for the socity . Again , if the govt doesnot invest in the hospital the remaining hospital become overpopulated because of significant increase of people . another problem is arrived in the villages , there are shortage of people for agriculture which will effect the overall food production all over the country .

In my view , Negative impact outwighted the positive development . If city population become overpopulated it will have detrimental consequences which i mention above

In conclusion , people come to the cities for better job and life option. Govt need to invest more in rural economy also provide all basic all basic facility such as cities so people feel safe and spend their life in rural city happily .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address the question and make your position clear: you consider both effects and conclude that the negative impact outweighs the positive. Relevant points include urban investment in infrastructure, pollution and pressure on hospitals, and a shortage of agricultural workers in rural areas. However, some ideas are asserted rather than explained. For example, the claim that population growth leads governments to invest in roads, metro systems and housing would be stronger with a clearer explanation or a specific example. The positive side is also less developed than the negative side, while the conclusion introduces the useful idea of improving rural facilities without explaining how this would change migration. Develop each main point with a reason or example and keep your position explicit throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting contrasting effects, a clear opinion, and a conclusion. This helps the reader follow the main argument. You also use signposts such as “On the one hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion.” However, some connections feel mechanical, and several ideas are crowded into the second body paragraph. The repeated use of “people” and “cities” makes progression less smooth, while “Again” does not clearly show how the hospital point relates to the preceding point. The final paragraph also repeats the conclusion that people move for jobs and a better life. Group related consequences together, use clearer references, and make each paragraph develop one central idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “infrastructure,” “overpopulation,” “food production,” and “detrimental consequences.” These choices show an attempt to discuss the issue beyond very basic terms. However, spelling errors and inaccurate or awkward collocations are noticeable, as in “palces,” “rapidely,” “job shortage in the job market,” and “remaining hospital.” Some expressions are also imprecise, such as “better life option” and “rural city,” which make the intended meaning less clear. Aim for accurate, natural combinations rather than adding more difficult words: for example, use “a shortage of jobs,” “rural communities,” and “access to public services.” Proofreading spelling and word forms would also improve clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a conditional structure in “if the govt doesnot invest in the hospital…” and a relative clause in “people…work in this jobs help to grow the cities economy.” This shows some range, but control is uneven, and errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Examples include missing or incorrect articles and plurals (“in city area,” “in the hospital”), subject–verb agreement (“people comes”), and verb forms (“which will effect the overall food production”). Sentence boundaries and capitalization are also inconsistent, particularly where a new sentence begins with a lowercase word. Practise building accurate complex sentences, checking that subjects match verbs, and using full stops and capital letters consistently.

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