Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

IN recent years, many people from rural areas have been moving to cities search to better job ,education and facilities. AS a results, the population in the countryside is decreasing day by day. In my opinion this is a negative development because creates many problems for both cities and villages.

Firstly, migration from villages and cities creates serious problem of the cities. when many people move to urban areas cities become overcrowded. This leads to traffic jams, and pollution unemployment and high house reants. For example in big cities like Karachi and Lahore , people face daily traffic and lack of clean water Becaues of the increasing population. Villages life is very beautiful life and many facilities for example, milk butte air etc.

Secondly, villages also suffer from due to this migration .when young people and educated people leave their villages ,their is a storage of worker for farming and other works. As a results ,agriculture production decreases and only old people and children are left behind.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

Your position is clear: you consider rural-to-urban migration negative, and you give relevant effects on both cities and villages. The examples of overcrowding, traffic, pollution and pressure on water in Karachi and Lahore help illustrate the urban impact, while the shortage of farm workers develops the rural side. However, the response addresses the task only partially: the ideas are brief and several are listed rather than explained, and the claim that village life is beautiful is not clearly connected to your argument. The required minimum of 250 words is not met; this limits how fully you can explain your reasons and provide supporting examples. Develop each main point with a cause-and-effect explanation and a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic overall structure: an introduction states your view, followed by two paragraphs that discuss effects on cities and villages. Sequencing words such as “Firstly” and “Secondly” help signal the main points, and the reader can generally follow the argument. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven: the sentence about village life and “milk, butter, air” appears abruptly in the city paragraph, and the final paragraph ends without a concluding summary. Some links are repetitive or awkward, including “As a results” and the repeated use of “when.” Group related ideas together, use clear references to connect causes and effects, and add a brief conclusion to give the response a more complete progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “overcrowded,” “traffic jams,” “pollution,” “agriculture production” and “educated people.” These terms show an attempt to discuss both urban pressures and rural consequences. However, the range is limited, and several inaccurate or unclear choices make parts of the response difficult to interpret, such as “cities search to better job,” “a storage of worker,” and “milk butte air.” Spelling and word-form errors, including “reants” and “Becaues,” also reduce clarity. Aim for precise collocations and check spelling carefully; for example, describe a “shortage of agricultural workers” and “access to basic facilities” rather than relying on unclear lists.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences to explain cause and effect, such as “When many people move to urban areas, cities become overcrowded,” and you use a basic range of sentence forms. However, the range remains limited, and frequent errors in sentence construction, agreement, articles and punctuation sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “because creates many problems” lacks a clear subject, while “their is a storage of worker” has errors in the verb form and sentence structure. Several sentences also run together or begin with lowercase letters after full stops. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses with correct punctuation and agreement.

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