Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The topic was very interesting rural people are moving to cities so the population in the countryside is decreasing some positive view are discussed.

The rural people are moving to cities i think is the best way to educated her children to make a good responsible person because city can provide more jobs in offices factories and bussiness. People can access good school collage and universties.some parents are dreams our children become a doctor pilot and army officers to support our family. One is main reason to leave the rural area and shifted to cities. I believe that after the 4 to 5 years the rural people are shifted to cities because all the facilties are available in the city. Some people are leave the rural area due to less facilities and not good school and hospitals or shopping centres. Some parents are able to provide all the facultry to her families but in rural areas less opportunity in rural areas that is the main reason the people are moving to cities.

On the other view some disadvantage now the rural areas people are shifted to cities the population of countryside is decreasing. The backward areas uninhabited and abandored. Cities become overcrowded beacuse to many people move there and more people create traffic issues and transport problem they have not enough jobs for everyone. Rural areas lose farmers and workers which can reduce food production. Living in the cities is to much expensive house food and transportation are also.

In my opinion the government should also increased the jobs for the people and also make the society for people where the lived.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both sides of the development and give a view that rural-to-city migration can benefit families through education and employment, while also creating problems such as overcrowding and reduced food production. These are relevant points, but the position is not fully clear: the opening refers to “some positive view,” and the conclusion recommends government action without directly stating whether the overall change is positive or negative. Several ideas are listed rather than explained, such as the claim that migration helps children become “a good responsible person.” Develop fewer points with a clear explanation or example, and state your overall judgement consistently. The response meets the task’s length requirement; 14 words copied from the prompt were excluded from the count.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure: the first main paragraph focuses on reasons people move, the next presents disadvantages, and the final paragraph offers a recommendation. This gives the reader some organisation. However, progression within paragraphs is difficult to follow because ideas are repeated or joined without clear relationships, as in “less opportunity in rural areas” and “that is the main reason.” Transitions such as “On the other view” signal a contrast, but the opening and conclusion do not connect the discussion into a clear overall argument. Use topic sentences to identify each paragraph’s main point, group related reasons together, and use linking expressions and pronouns accurately rather than relying on repeated references to “rural people” and “cities.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “overcrowded,” “traffic issues,” “food production,” and “facilities.” However, the range is limited and several word choices, collocations, and spellings make parts of the response difficult to understand. For example, “make the society for people where the lived” does not clearly express the intended government action, while “some positive view” and “the facultry” are unclear. Spelling errors such as “bussiness,” “universties,” and “abandored” also reduce clarity. Build a more precise set of phrases for discussing migration, public services, and rural economies, and check spelling and collocations when editing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a reason clause beginning “because” and a contrast introduced by “On the other view.” However, the range is limited, and attempts to connect several ideas often produce faulty sentence structures. Errors in verb forms and agreement occur in phrases such as “some people are leave” and “the government should also increased.” Articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, as in “city can provide more jobs” and the run-on sequence “People can access good school collage and universties.some parents…” These patterns sometimes make the intended meaning hard to follow. Practise forming complete sentences with one main idea, then check subject–verb agreement, verb forms, articles, and punctuation.

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