Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Now-a-days,many people live in country side amd are moving to big cities and towns.Because of this the population in rural areas is decreasing.In my opinion,it is negative effect on the development because it creates many issues for both places.

For the foremost one, the urban area is well- developed so the individuals had willingness to live in the cities because there so many colleges and universities for the students to get a degree and do jobs in a big companies and instead of this the people get more money.Also cities have good hospitals, shopping malls, theatre and many more to travel the whole cities and the transportation system was also more developed in the urban People can enjoy better lifestyle in modern area.

However,if the people living in the urban area then there are so many causes.One of the most problem is facing the people is that there is so much crowdness in the cities and there is too much traffic also and that will cause the air and noise Adding of this the housing becomes too expensive too buy in the urban area.Poor people did not efford the house that was the reason ehy poor people live in small places and why they are Second reason why the country side losing young workers.Only old people live in the rural area.So the farming becomes more difficult in today's time because there are no workers in the small area if the farmers are not there the food production will reduce and if the food production will decrease there is no food in the world.

To summarise, although the people moving the develop cities gives people better jobs andive a healthy lifestyle .But I believe the people living in the modern city then there is so much issue which includes crwodness and noise and sir pollution .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you consider rural-to-urban migration negative, and you give relevant reasons, including pressure on city housing and traffic, and the loss of rural workers affecting farming and food production. These points show an understanding of the task. However, the response only partly develops the evaluation. The first body paragraph mainly lists attractions of cities—universities, jobs, hospitals and shopping—without clearly explaining how these benefits relate to your overall negative judgement. Some claims, such as “there is no food in the world,” are too absolute and need more precise support. Explain the effects on both rural and urban communities and develop each reason with a realistic example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the ideas are grouped broadly by topic. However, progression within paragraphs is difficult to follow, and links between ideas are often mechanical or unclear. For example, the second body paragraph moves from crowding and traffic to housing costs, then to older rural residents and food production, with little explanation connecting these points. Phrases such as “For the foremost one,” “However,” and “Second reason” do not always signal the relationship accurately. The conclusion also repeats earlier points rather than drawing them together. Use one main idea per paragraph, order supporting details logically, and make references and transitions clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “rural areas,” “transportation system,” “food production,” and “housing,” so the reader can identify the main subject. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or misspelled expressions make parts of the response difficult to understand. Examples include “crowdness,” “efford,” “sir pollution,” and “do jobs in a big companies.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “travel the whole cities” and “modern area.” Aim for accurate collocations and check spelling carefully; choosing a smaller number of precise expressions will communicate your ideas more effectively than relying on awkward or unclear wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including cause-and-effect structures with “because” and “if.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in sentence formation and punctuation can make meaning hard to follow. For instance, “Because of this the population in rural areas is decreasing” is left as a fragment after the preceding sentence, while “if the people living in the urban area then there are so many causes” lacks a complete grammatical structure. Verb forms and agreement are also inconsistent, as in “the transportation system was” and “the people get.” Use complete sentences, check subject–verb agreement and tense, and break long chains of clauses into shorter, controlled sentences.

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