Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays, mostly people which living to the rural side of country are moving to the city side of the country to achieve more and more opportunities as well as facilities. People of different country are going from countryside to the developed cities of the country and the population of the rural area become declined. From my perspective it is one of the negative development of the time.

Firstly, by people moving from villages to the cities side of country is one of the main cause of population and trafic as well as pollution in the cities side. Such as, If there are more people going to the cities side of country at a time, then they may be create multi problem like at a time, management will not be able to facilitate at a time to all the migrant people of country, there fore, we it is responsibility of state to give opportunities to the people from countryside, like prevent them to move from village at a time to make difficulties for developed cities.

Secondly, it is also the cause of destruction in the rural sides of the country. Because by their migration, the governament not even think for the facilities of rural people, because no one even ask them for their right and people only focusing on the migration to development cities of their countyr in the world.

In conclussion, it is very negative development, that people moving from rural area to cities side of their country to become facilitiate themself and achieve more opportunities, but it is the main cause of creating problem for the people of city side and the undevelopment of rural side.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you consider rural-to-urban migration negative, and you give two relevant reasons—pressure on city services and the decline of rural communities. This addresses the main question, but the response only partly develops those ideas. For example, you mention that authorities may be unable to serve migrants, yet you do not explain which services are affected or provide a specific example. The claim that governments neglect rural residents is also asserted rather than supported, and the conclusion mostly repeats earlier points. To strengthen the response, explain the consequences of each reason in more detail and include a concrete example, while keeping your negative position clear throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs signposted by “Firstly” and “Secondly,” and a conclusion. This gives the reader a coherent overall route through your argument. However, some links between ideas are mechanical or unclear. In the first body paragraph, “Such as” introduces an example that is not clearly formed, and the sentence beginning “If there are more people…” becomes difficult to follow as several points are joined together. The second paragraph also starts with “Because” as a fragment, leaving the relationship between migration and rural decline under-explained. Use clearer sentence boundaries and connect each reason to its consequence explicitly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “opportunities,” “facilities,” “migration,” “population,” and “pollution,” so the reader can identify the subject and your main concerns. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or repetitive expressions make parts of the argument difficult to understand. Phrases such as “cities side,” “multi problem,” and “undevelopment” are not natural choices in this context, while “country” and “people” recur frequently. Spelling errors such as “governament,” “countyr,” and “conclussion” also reduce accuracy. Build a more precise set of terms for urban pressure and rural decline, and check collocations and spelling when revising.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, the range is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty, which sometimes makes the reader work to understand your point. For example, “people which living” has an incorrect relative clause and verb form, while “the population … become declined” has problems with tense and sentence construction. The sentence beginning “If there are more people…” contains several clauses without clear grammatical control, and “Because by their migration…” is not a complete sentence. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, verb forms, and complete clause structures before adding more complexity; use shorter sentences where needed.

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