Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

It is argued that people are migrating to urban areas from rural areas in most of the countries around the world to decrease the population of rural sides. In my perspetive this is not a positive thing for development.

On the one hand, moving to cities will provide more eucational and employment opportunities. In urban areas, generally there are more healthcare and educational facilities. Therefore, more people from countryside wanted to shift into cities. For example, when a villager needs some medical assistance in rural areas. They may not find any better facilities there, so they move to urban centres to gain such benefits. As the urban centers are developed so the villagers often get benefits. Therefore, migration can contribute to persoal development.

On the other hand, when vast population migrates from rural to urban areas it create many difficulties for everyone. Firstly, more accomodation are required to adjust those people, cities may become overcrowded. This leads to more traffic jams and road accidents. Secondly, rural centers may face shortage of young population, particularlly, in agriclture. Concequently agricuture production may decline and it eads to economic lose in country that may affect both urban and rura areas.

In my opinion, although rural migration have certain benefits for people but it has more disadvantages. In such case, government shoud invest more in rural areas for example improve heath facilities, introduced more educational institutions and improve infrastructure in countryside, so that they don't need to migrate into cities.

In conclusion, while moving to cities can provide individual certain benefits but it has it's own negative concequences.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You answer the question directly and maintain a clear view that rural-to-urban migration is negative overall, while acknowledging benefits such as access to education, employment and healthcare. The discussion is relevant, and the example of a villager seeking medical care helps illustrate why people move. However, the positive side is developed more fully as a reason for migration than as an evaluation of its effects, and some consequences are asserted rather than explained. For instance, you link rural population loss to reduced agricultural production and national economic loss, but do not show how this would affect people or provide a specific example. Develop each main point with a clearer cause-and-effect explanation and support your overall judgement more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, two contrasting body paragraphs, a stated opinion and a conclusion. The progression from individual benefits to wider disadvantages is easy to follow, and signposts such as “On the one hand,” “Firstly” and “In conclusion” help readers navigate the argument. At times, however, linking is mechanical or repetitive: “Therefore” appears several times, and the final paragraph repeats the position without adding a new synthesis. Some references are also unclear, such as “those people” and “such benefits,” because the exact referent is not always explicit. Use a wider range of natural transitions and connect each example more directly to the point it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of topic vocabulary, including “employment opportunities,” “healthcare facilities,” “overcrowded,” “traffic jams” and “agricultural production.” These choices make the main ideas clear, and you attempt more formal expressions such as “economic loss.” However, spelling errors and imprecise or unnatural combinations reduce accuracy, for example “rural sides,” “accomodation,” “economic lose” and “negative concequences.” Some wording is also repetitive, particularly “cities,” “rural areas” and “benefits.” Aim to learn accurate collocations and check spelling carefully; more precise terms such as “rural communities,” “housing” and “agricultural output” would make the discussion sound more controlled and academic.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use both simple and complex sentence forms, including a conditional example beginning “when a villager needs some medical assistance” and a contrast clause in “although rural migration have certain benefits.” Most sentences remain understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. Subject–verb agreement is inaccurate in “it create many difficulties” and “migration have”; there are also problems with articles, plurals and sentence construction, as in “more accomodation are required.” The sentence beginning “For example, when a villager needs…” is a fragment because it is not joined to a main clause. Work on agreement and complete sentence structure, and proofread punctuation and clause boundaries. These corrections would improve accuracy while preserving your attempts at varied structures.

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