Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In todays modern world cities life are considered more benificial rather then living in a country sides. Individuals in many states are transfered with their families to big cities for better oppurtunities and lifestyle. In this essay i will state the positive impact of moving from rural to urban sides before giving conlusion.

One evident benifite of moving from hometown to develpoed areas is a large amount of oppurtunities, and better future. cities are more known for making a large sum of money. because of the waste businesses and highly payable jobs. for example, people in village sides getting 25thousand ruppes per month in teaching jobs in schools, while people in big devoloped areas get 1lac ruppes per month while teaching in the universities.

Another reason that moving to urban areas will be beneficial will be good education for people childerns. devoloped places are more well know for getting a good education instead of getting education in undevoloped places. for instance, there is no institutes in villages for CA studies while cities have a lot of well know universities and colleges.

On the other hand of moving from your homeplace is also detramental. people forget about their heritage as well as cannot meet with their family members. secondly, urband life causes a major health problems because of pollution and highly crowded traffics.

In conlusion, city life is more beneficial then village life. people get more oppurtunities as well as better future ideas. It also have some drawbacks like health problems and isolation.In my opinion urban people are more smat and successeful.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You answer the question directly and maintain a clear view that rural-to-urban migration is mainly positive, while acknowledging disadvantages. The two supporting reasons—better-paid employment and access to education—are relevant, and the salary comparison and lack of CA institutes in villages help illustrate them. You also recognise costs such as pollution, traffic and separation from family, so both sides of the development are addressed. However, some points are asserted rather than fully explained: for example, the link between urban opportunities and a “better future” could be clarified, and the disadvantages receive less development than the benefits. Explain how these effects influence rural communities overall and support your final judgement more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two paragraphs supporting the benefits, a paragraph on drawbacks, and a conclusion. This makes the overall line of argument easy to follow. You use signposting such as “for example,” “On the other hand,” and “In conclusion” to show relationships between ideas. At times, however, these links feel mechanical, and some connections are unclear. The opening promises to discuss positive impacts before concluding, but the shift to disadvantages is not prepared for. The sentence beginning “On the other hand of moving from your homeplace” is also awkwardly connected to the preceding discussion. Use clearer topic sentences and link each example explicitly to the point it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “opportunities,” “lifestyle,” “heritage,” “pollution,” and “crowded traffic.” However, spelling errors are frequent and sometimes make the reader pause, as in “benificial,” “oppurtunities,” “develpoed,” and “detramental.” There are also inaccurate or unnatural word combinations: “cities life,” “waste businesses,” “highly payable jobs,” and “better future ideas” do not express the intended meanings naturally. Some words are repeated, particularly “developed” and “opportunities.” Build a more precise range of collocations and check spelling carefully; this would make your meaning clearer and more fluent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a comparison with “while” and a reason introduced by “because.” The main ideas are generally understandable, but some grammatical errors affect clarity. For example, “cities life are considered” has problems with the noun phrase and subject–verb agreement, while “It also have some drawbacks” does not agree in number. The sentence “people in village sides getting 25thousand ruppes per month” is missing a finite verb, and “there is no institutes” has incorrect agreement. Articles, plurals and sentence boundaries also need attention. Practise building accurate complete sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and comparisons while checking agreement and punctuation.

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