Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Recent decades, people are shifting from village to town areas considerebly. For this movement there has been negative effect occuring in the cities.

In modern era, mainly in development country the rise of economy occuring only in the city areas not in the country side. People are shifting there houses and comes to the city area for their better life. In the rural area the education system are not sufficient for every children. Many children did not go school and there is no rules for getting them educated. Besides, health service was a major concern for village people. Because the hospitals are far away from the village. A critical patient can not go quickly to the hospital. As consequence, there is many deaths occure in the countryside. Pregnent womens death ration increases day by day for this transport problem. On the other hand there is also concern about the jobless people. There is no work for illiterate people in the village. In the other sense, buisness man can not do their trade from village. Also the network connection are poor. For this reason they came in the cities regularly

For coming in a good number the cities have a good number of people. This people need home to live. But the city areas were limited which create a vulnerable situation. For making their home they cut down the trees to secure there places. For cutting trees it increases the temperature which rises the green house effect. As example, Bangladesh capital Dhaka has been the number one polluted city in the word. Not only pollution but also other fundamental things like daily food and security gets effected by this. Crime rate can gets higher with population. Also, the movement of many people causes traffic jam which slower the daily time.

The consequence of shifting people from village to town has a great consequences. It increase the effect of pollution, jam and crime. Morever, it affects human daily life which they do not want.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You take a generally negative view and give relevant reasons, including pressure on city housing, tree loss, pollution, crime and traffic. The discussion of rural services also helps explain why people leave, with examples such as limited schooling and distant hospitals. However, the position is not stated clearly in the opening, which says there has been a “negative effect” without specifying the overall development, and the conclusion mainly repeats a list of consequences. Several claims, such as rising deaths and crime, are asserted rather than explained or supported with a specific example. State your judgement directly at the start, then develop two or three main effects with clearer cause-and-effect reasoning and relevant evidence.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph about conditions in rural areas, a paragraph on city pressures, and a concluding statement. Linking expressions such as “Besides,” “On the other hand,” and “For this reason” show an effort to connect ideas. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow: the rural paragraph moves from education and healthcare to employment and network access without clearly grouping or prioritising these points. Some links are repetitive or do not express the relationship precisely, and “For coming in a good number” makes the transition to city impacts unclear. Organise each body paragraph around one central point and use clearer references and transitions to show how each example supports it.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “health service,” “green house effect,” “pollution,” “crime rate,” and “traffic jam,” so the reader can identify the main issues. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making meaning harder to follow. Examples include “shifting there houses,” “pregnent womens death ration,” and “the daily time”; spelling errors such as “considerebly,” “buisness,” and “Morever” also reduce accuracy. Aim to learn common phrases as complete units and check spelling and word forms. More precise alternatives would help you explain the effects of migration without relying on repeated general words such as “people,” “city,” and “effect.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including cause-and-effect structures such as “For cutting trees it increases the temperature which rises the green house effect.” However, control is inconsistent, and frequent errors in sentence structure, verb forms, agreement, articles and plurals can make the reader pause. For example, “the education system are” has incorrect agreement, “Many children did not go school” is missing a necessary preposition, and “there is many deaths occure” combines incorrect agreement with an unsuitable verb form. Some sentences also lack a clear grammatical connection between clauses. Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, then build longer sentences with one clear main clause and correctly formed subordinate clauses.

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