Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing rapidly. In my words i would like se say that No a postive change.Because most of the people belong from the countryside areas are like workers and people who give us crops of every kind if they will move to the cities than who will the person who help us like most of the people are moving from there.

On one hand, every human being need a profestional life to live in this country or world. people have many kinds of arugments with the govermnets and other national.However, most the people wants to move from the countryside to cities because they also need a quality of life education for there children and health treatments on time and other faclities which they can,t get in countryside area.

On the other hand, what will happen cities when rural people will move in cities commonly. The population of the city increase rapidly and traffic system also would be mantain and have check and balance on daily routine. People of the cities will see croweded areas and peoples in every town. But one fact is that cities people will not able to manage there routine like village or rural people are adopting at the moment like walk up daily early in the morning and finished there work on time. One quality which i personaly like of rural people that the are very panctual on time. and when ever you go in village area at early morning you understand one things that they all are busy in there work.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You take a negative position, especially in the opening, and give relevant points about the loss of agricultural workers and pressure on city services. You also acknowledge why people move, mentioning education, healthcare and other facilities, so the response engages with both sides of the issue. However, the position is not consistently explained: the opening claim that rural residents provide crops is not developed with a clear example, and the later points about punctuality and daily routines do not clearly show why migration itself is negative. The discussion therefore remains limited and some ideas are unclear or insufficiently supported. To strengthen the response, explain the consequences of rural depopulation and urban growth in more detail, using a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has an identifiable structure, with an introduction followed by paragraphs signposted by “On one hand” and “On the other hand.” This gives the reader a basic sense of the two perspectives. However, progression within the paragraphs is often difficult to follow: the first paragraph moves from agricultural workers to an unclear question about who will help, while the final paragraph shifts from city crowding to rural people’s punctuality without showing the connection. Linking expressions such as “However” and “But” are used, but they do not always clarify the relationship between ideas. Organise each paragraph around one main point, then explain its consequence and support it with an example; use clear references so readers can follow who or what each sentence refers to.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “countryside,” “crops,” “quality of life,” “health treatments,” “population” and “traffic system.” These choices show an attempt to discuss both rural and urban conditions. However, the range is limited, and frequent spelling errors and inaccurate word choices sometimes make the meaning difficult to understand, as in “profestional,” “arugments,” “croweded” and “panctual.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “people belong from the countryside areas” and “move in cities.” Build a more precise set of expressions for migration and its effects, and check spelling carefully. Choosing accurate collocations will make your ideas clearer and more appropriate for an academic essay.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with clauses, for example, “because they also need a quality of life education for there children and health treatments on time.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in agreement, articles, verb forms and sentence boundaries make some ideas hard to follow. Examples include “every human being need,” “the population of the city increase,” and “what will happen cities when rural people will move in cities.” Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, particularly where sentences begin with lowercase “people” or continue after a full stop with “and.” Practise building shorter, complete sentences first, then combine them with accurate conjunctions and check subject–verb agreement and tense.

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