Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Now in many countries around the world rural people are moving to cities so the population in the countryside is decreasing. From my opinion its a negative way.

On the first hand people who are moving to the cities they get better facilities were there such as students who are moving from rural area to urban area they can get better education or medical facilities transpottation system very well a well as they get job opportunities were there. secondly they get better income and get a chance to improve their personal proffession.

On the other hand there are some demerits related with this when too much people moving rural area to urban area so the population will increased in urban area and decrease in rural area and they also face too much traffic there and also the pollution were also increase in the urban area side and also play a harmful impact on their body. and also agriculture system slowly finished.

in conclusion i beleive that government should try to change the way of rural area government should provide better education and health care and transpottstion in the rural area .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear overall view that this is a negative development, and you identify relevant effects: urban crowding, traffic, pollution and a decline in agriculture. You also acknowledge why people move, mentioning education, healthcare and employment. However, the response only partially develops the task: these points are listed rather than explained with examples or supporting detail, and the conclusion’s recommendation for government action is brief. The response contains 171 words, so it does not meet the 250-word minimum; 20 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. To strengthen your answer, explain how the effects influence people or communities and add a specific example to support your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

Your response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction to contrasting points and then a conclusion. Phrases such as “On the first hand,” “On the other hand” and “in conclusion” help signal the stages of your argument. However, progression within the body paragraphs is limited: several ideas are joined in long strings, and the first paragraph shifts quickly from facilities to income without explaining their relationship. Some linking is repetitive, especially the repeated use of “and also,” while “On the first hand” is not the usual expression for introducing a contrast. Use one main idea per paragraph, connect each point to your position, and vary linking phrases so the organisation feels less mechanical.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “education,” “medical facilities,” “job opportunities,” “traffic,” “pollution” and “agriculture.” This shows a basic range relevant to the question. However, vocabulary is often repetitive or imprecise, and several word choices or spellings make the message less clear, such as “personal proffession,” “demerits related with this” and “agriculture system slowly finished.” The repeated “better” and “too much” also limit precision. Build a wider set of accurate phrases for describing migration and its consequences, and check spelling and collocations. For example, describe agriculture as “declining” rather than saying it “finished.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and your main position is generally understandable. However, the range is limited, and attempts to combine several ideas often produce faulty sentence structures. For example, “people who are moving to the cities they get better facilities” has an unclear clause structure, while “the population will increased” uses an incorrect verb form. There are also recurring problems with articles, plurals and agreement, as in “too much people” and “the pollution were also increase.” These errors sometimes make the reader work to understand the intended meaning. Practise forming accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and check verb forms and agreement.

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