Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowdays database provide the information the rural people are moving to urban area that is why the popluation in the countryside is decreasing I strongly agree with statement because In rural side do not have proper facticities like lack of instrafrastucture, road are uneqaul . and there are lot convience is not provide. and i believe that this is negative development I wil discuss all factors in this essay.

Firstly, Goverement does not focus on the countryside area so that is reason many people imgrated in cities . and number of people are increased day by day in cities . for example in village there are no proper and the vehicles stuck on the roads , in addition transportation is the big issue many student go to the school or college by walk. On the ther hand people face the difficulty when heavy rain come and flooding it destory the the many houses. mostly Village house are mad from mud so the houses can easily destory.

Other issues is that, many humans move to urban area becuase of unemployment problems . Futhermore, village people people life is not easy becuase the basic necessities are not fullfill, many village children are not go to school becuase they have not resource or money to educate their children. the major problem is that hospital are not available like in cities there so many hospital people can easily their treatment. for example the eye trust hospital is located in rawalpindi and many people are travell long distance for their treatment .

In conclusion I think there is negative devleopment becuase if the rural people move from village to city then how to agricultural acivity excutive and i believe governemnt should look these matter. and provide the basic facliities to the rural people

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you consider rural-to-urban migration a negative development, and the conclusion returns to this view. You give relevant reasons, including poor transport and infrastructure, unemployment, limited schooling and healthcare, and the possible effect on agriculture. Examples such as students walking to school and patients travelling to Rawalpindi help make the discussion concrete. However, some points are asserted rather than fully explained. For instance, the link between rural depopulation and agricultural activity is only raised in the conclusion, while the flooding example is not clearly connected to migration or its wider consequences. Develop each main reason by explaining how it affects people and why it makes the trend negative; this would make the response more consistently complete and persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. The body paragraphs broadly group infrastructure and living conditions separately from employment and services, and signposts such as “Firstly,” “Furthermore” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the main stages. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the discussion moves from roads to transport, flooding and housing without consistently showing how each point supports the central argument. Some linking phrases are mechanical or confusing, including “On the ther hand,” where no contrasting idea follows. Repeated references to “village people” also make the flow less smooth. Use clearer topic sentences and connect examples explicitly to the point they illustrate.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “infrastructure,” “unemployment,” “basic necessities,” “transportation” and “agricultural activity.” These choices show an effort to discuss several aspects of rural life. However, spelling errors and inaccurate word forms are frequent, for example “popluation,” “imgrated,” “facliities” and “excutive,” and some expressions are difficult to interpret, such as “there are lot convience is not provide.” Repetition of “people,” “village” and “problem” also limits range. Build accuracy with common topic collocations and check spelling carefully; for example, use “access to public transport” and “employment opportunities” rather than assembling phrases word by word. More precise vocabulary would make your ideas easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple statements and attempts at longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “because,” “so that” and “when.” This gives some variety, and the overall meaning can usually be followed. However, sentence boundaries and clause construction are often inaccurate. For example, “Goverement does not focus on the countryside area so that is reason many people imgrated in cities” combines clauses without clear punctuation and has problems with articles and verb form. There are also errors in agreement and sentence structure, as in “many village children are not go to school” and “hospital are not available.” Practise building accurate subject–verb patterns and separating complete ideas with full stops. Greater control of these structures would make your reasoning clearer.

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