Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowdays, Movement of people move to urban area i think its is negative development. Although the cities offer the job opporunities and health facilities. but it decrese the polulation in rural area which is negtive imapct on agriculture.

Firstly many people imgrated to uraban area why becuase the lacl of unemployment. in rural area people depend on the agriculture or farming and they have no get enough money to run the hosuse or meet the basic need. the number of job have minumum and people does not fulfill the basic necessities. another reason is that education facilities , health sector are not proper that is why people change their location . for example many young students in pakistan imgrated from village to citites such as lahore and islamabad for better study or well paid job . Many people want to change the lives and want to earn more money becuase they see the good life. some people relocate to cities because they like the modern life and get the experience of professional work.

Secondly there are also disadvantages when the many people move from rural area to urban area and polpulation is reduce in rural rea.Consquently, there is negative imapct on agricultural. The argiculture production is lower annd the supply of food is reduce in overall country.

I think the government should take step to reduce the imgration due to some work. For example the goverment provide the basic necessities of life such improve the infrastructure, hospital faclities, increase the employment, mordern technology introduce in rural . These improvement enourage the many individuals to saty in their home town and spend the quality life.

In conclusion, My perspective is that moving people from village to cities is negative delopment if the government improves the basic faclities more people live i their hometown. because its impact on the both area becuase cities today is overpopulation which pressure increased on housing , traffi and so on thing.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You give a clear answer that rural-to-urban migration is negative, and you address both why people move and the consequences for rural areas. The examples of young people moving to Lahore and Islamabad for education or work, and the link between fewer rural residents and lower food production, are relevant. You also suggest government measures, such as improving hospitals and employment, which supports your position. However, some points are asserted rather than explained: for instance, the claim that agricultural output falls would be stronger with a clearer explanation of how labour shortages affect farming. The discussion of why people move is more developed than the effects on cities, which appear mainly in the conclusion. Develop that consequence and support key claims more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, paragraphs explaining migration and its effects, a proposed response, and a conclusion. Sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the main stages. The central position also remains consistent. However, some connections are mechanical or unclear. The opening “Although the cities offer the job opportunities and health facilities. but…” creates a broken contrast, while “Secondly” introduces disadvantages without clearly distinguishing the effects on rural communities from those on cities. The conclusion combines several ideas in a long, confusing sentence. Use clearer topic sentences and connect each cause, consequence, and example explicitly; ensure pronouns and references such as “these improvements” have an unmistakable antecedent.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “employment,” “basic necessities,” “agricultural production,” “infrastructure,” and “overpopulation.” These choices show an attempt to discuss causes, consequences, and possible solutions rather than relying only on very general language. However, spelling errors and inaccurate word forms are frequent enough to make reading less smooth, as in “imgrated,” “polpulation,” “agriculture” (where “agricultural” is needed), and “delopment.” Some collocations are also unnatural, such as “the number of job have minimum” and “modern technology introduce.” Build accuracy by checking spelling and learning common word partnerships, for example “limited job opportunities,” “agricultural output,” and “introduce modern technology.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a reason clause in “people relocate to cities because they like the modern life” and a conditional idea about government improvements encouraging people to stay. This gives the response some structural variety. However, many sentences contain errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries. For example, “the number of job have minimum” has incorrect agreement and an incomplete construction, while “the government provide” needs a correctly formed verb. The opening also joins an “Although” clause to “but” incorrectly, and several sentences run together or lack clear punctuation. Practise building accurate subject–verb patterns and separating complete sentences; then add complex clauses while keeping their grammar controlled.

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