Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Huge change are seemed nowadays, the villagers are moving towords the modern citites which results in declined population at the country side . Acording to my propective it is very postive sign but somehow negative points also arise . As , because of facuillties in urban areas as education , industry , health, better opportunities in contrast to rular areas . Similarly the negative effect on our envirnoment rapis increase of pollution and trafic rapidly reason increasing of citizens .

Good for people who can not survive in villages becasue of low income as well very less opportunities like jobs to move forword to cities increase in there better way of living in income as well becasue of person in home do jobs in urban areas .

Likewise, the education facuilities students can easily filfill there dreams moreover, health benifits may be the main reason individuals were moving rapidly towords the towns.Majorly these two main issues are highligted . For example a most of the students were leaving there home for higher studies at the country side no internet no capable academies , teachers so moved to gain beter education . Similarly, good health is the first and foremost nead of humans if we were healthy active we can cope with world in moder time advance machines and technolohy are avaialble in municipal areas which facuilitates the humans easily and immediately .

Nevertheless , lossing the natural beauty , fresh air ,orignal healthy foods ,and colourfull life colours are somehow affceted in cities because in urban sides very fast life ,polluted environment , and artifical foods which health as well .

If, we protize to live in cities in contrast to rular life huge differnce but everthing has negative and postive propects .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear overall view that the movement is mostly positive, while acknowledging environmental and lifestyle costs. Relevant reasons include access to jobs, education and healthcare, and the example of students leaving rural areas for further study helps illustrate one point. However, the position becomes less clear in the final sentence, which says there are both positive and negative aspects without reaffirming which outweighs the other. Several ideas are also asserted rather than explained: for instance, the benefits of urban employment and the effects of pollution could be linked more directly to people’s lives. Develop each main reason with a clearer explanation or specific example, and maintain your judgement consistently from introduction to conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable overall shape: it introduces the issue, discusses benefits, then considers disadvantages. Linking expressions such as “Similarly,” “Likewise” and “Nevertheless” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow because several points are crowded together, and some links do not clearly express the relationship between them. The opening, for example, moves from urban facilities to pollution in one long sequence, while the final paragraph introduces several losses without developing them. Paragraphing is present but the argument would be clearer if each paragraph focused on one main idea, supported it, and then connected it explicitly to the overall position. Use fewer, more precise transitions and clear topic sentences.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “opportunities,” “polluted environment,” “natural beauty” and “higher studies,” and you refer to both urban benefits and rural qualities. However, the range is limited and many spelling errors or inaccurate word choices make parts of the response difficult to understand, such as “propective,” “facuillties,” “rapis increase” and “artifical foods.” Some combinations are also unnatural, including “increase in there better way of living” and “colourfull life colours.” These problems reduce precision even when the intended idea can be inferred. Build a reliable set of topic vocabulary and check spelling and collocations; choose straightforward, accurate expressions rather than attempting phrases whose meaning is unclear.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “because” and “which,” but control is inconsistent. Frequent problems with sentence formation and verb forms make several ideas hard to follow: “Huge change are seemed” has an incorrect verb construction, and “the villagers are moving … which results in declined population” does not form a clear, accurate clause. Agreement, articles and punctuation also need attention, as in “the education facilities students can easily…” and the comma-heavy opening. Some sentences are fragments or run-ons, particularly the list of urban advantages and disadvantages. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then add one subordinate clause at a time. Proofread for agreement, articles and sentence boundaries.

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