Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-07-26
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.
Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
Task 2
In this modern era, many nations across the world, people living in rural areas are migrating to urban areas. So, the population in the village is decreasing which will lead to over population in cities and scarcity of resources and agriculture in villages will be eliminated. In this essay, I will elaborate the negative developments of migration to cities from countryside.
To embark with, people in rural area moving to cities will lead to overpopulation in cities. As overpopulation in cities will lead to shortage of residential areas people will not able to find house for living and there will also be shortage of jobs as jobs are limited and people appling for jobs will be more. And farmers who do farming in agricultural land if move to cities than use of agriculture land will be elimanted which will lead to shortage of food supply to government.
Furthermore, the scarcity of resources in the cities will noticed as overpopulation will lead to shortage of water, food and other essential goods. People will not able to get facilities properly like trains, Buses and Hospitals will be filled with crowd and it will become hard to control people which can lead to conflicts between peoples.
In conclusion, people moving to cities will lead to overpopulation and shortage of resources. The facilities like trains, buses, and Hospital were build before by seeing previous current population and over population will not able to use that facilities enthusiastically, which will lead to conflicts and problems to government.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The essay addresses the prompt by taking a clear position that rural-to-urban migration is a negative development. The ideas are relevant, focusing on overpopulation, resource scarcity, and the decline of agriculture. However, the development is somewhat limited. The arguments are repetitive, and the essay lacks specific examples or deeper analysis to support the claims. For instance, the point about food supply is mentioned but not explained in detail. To reach a higher band, you should provide more concrete evidence or real-world examples to substantiate your points, rather than simply restating the problems.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, and there is a logical progression of ideas. You use basic cohesive devices like 'To embark with', 'Furthermore', and 'In conclusion' to signal the structure. However, some transitions feel mechanical or slightly unnatural, such as 'To embark with' (which is not standard English). Additionally, the referencing is sometimes unclear, and the flow between sentences could be smoother. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to convey your meaning clearly. You use some topic-specific terms like 'overpopulation', 'scarcity', and 'agricultural land'. However, the range is limited, and there are instances of awkward word choices or phrasing, such as 'jobs appling for jobs will be more' and 'use of agriculture land will be elimanted'. There are also minor spelling errors like 'appling' and 'elimanted'. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and expanding your range of academic vocabulary to avoid repetition.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'facilities... were build'), missing articles (e.g., 'shortage of jobs'), and awkward sentence construction (e.g., 'people will not able to find house'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to affect the flow. To improve, pay closer attention to verb tenses, article usage, and ensuring that your complex sentences are constructed accurately.
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