Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-07-26

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In many countries now rural organism are trying to move developed cities and the strength of the people drops in countryside

Overall now a days mostly people want to become more advance that's why the public want to move cities to survive a good life and it's a positive development

I completely agree with this statement and mostly people believe that it's a good point for public. According to my knowledge people move from rural area for the lack of facilities, low educational institute, few hospitals and some short markets. I think it's too much difficult to survive a life in these conditions.

Secondly in cities there are a lot amount of facilities for beautiful life, shopping, hospitals and many more institutes. People prefer to live in cities just want to spend a luxuries life. And it's a great thought for people to become a good man with sweet life styles

A huge amount of people travel from rural area however the population in countryside dropped and somehow it is a negative point. We can redeveloped our rural areas and spend our life with a peaceful area of villages

Resultant it is a positive development people grow and do hard work and they also deserve a big facilities area. Being a good citizen we can spend our life beautiful in a developed city with a clean environment, There are also many source of income in cities and that's the reason the rural people move to developed cities and it's a valid development

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing the movement of people from rural to urban areas and taking a position. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you mention reasons like 'lack of facilities' and 'educational institutes,' these points are not fully extended or supported with specific examples. The argument is somewhat repetitive, and the conclusion contradicts the earlier point about the negative impact of rural depopulation without resolving the tension. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on one clear idea supported by a specific example or detailed explanation.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For instance, 'Resultant' is used incorrectly to start a sentence, and transitions like 'Secondly' and 'In many countries now' feel disjointed. The logical progression between sentences is sometimes weak, making it difficult to follow the flow of your argument. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each sentence logically follows the previous one will significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally limited and sometimes inaccurate. Phrases like 'rural organism' (likely meaning 'populations') and 'short markets' are confusing and do not convey the intended meaning. You rely on basic vocabulary such as 'good,' 'beautiful,' and 'big,' which restricts your ability to express complex ideas precisely. To reach a higher band, focus on using more academic collocations and precise terminology related to urbanisation and socio-economic development. Avoid informal phrasing like 'sweet life styles' and aim for more formal, objective language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('population... dropped'), article usage ('a lot amount of facilities'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are simple or contain errors that occasionally impede clarity, such as 'the strength of the people drops in countryside.' While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of prepositions before attempting more complex grammatical forms.

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