Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-07-28
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.
Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 7.0)
In a world that is undergoing rapid urbanization, more and more people from rural areas prefer moving to cities to staying in the countryside, thus making the population there decline, which is raising public concern. From my perspective,it is beneficial for industrial development but not so good for agriculture. The two are dialectically related.
There are some advantages of this trend. For rural areas, it can reduce the density of population,leaving people there with more space to build their own houses or grow their own crops. With fewer people, the environment and pollution in rural areas will also be improved dramatically. It can significantly improve quality of life of people from rural areas. For cities, There will be more people in urban areas and providing enough labor force for cities, thus it can promote the economic development and make industrial development forge ahead.
However, the drawbacks of this trend is also very distinct. The labor force in rural areas will dramatically decline, making it difficult for agriculture to develop. This will cause the shortage of agricultural products which supplied the city. In addition, there are many more problems with cities. First of all, the growth in populations in cities will significantly increase the unemployment in cities as settlers take up many posts they originally did. That can also intensify contradictions between urban and rural individuals, which will endanger social security.
In conclusion, there are advantages and disadvantages of migration from rural areas to urban areas. It's better for industrial development than for agricultural development. As a result,we should propose better policies to solve the problem and make it beneficial for sustainability.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 7.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
这篇文章回应了题目中的所有要求，并明确表达了“这一趋势是一把双刃剑”的立场。你有效地平衡了城市工业增长带来的益处与农村农业面临的弊端。然而，观点的展开略显不足。例如，文中提到了 'social security' 和 'contradictions'，但没有进行充分的解释或提供具体的例子来支持。为了达到更高的分数，请确保每一个主要观点都有具体的例证支持，或者对因果关系进行更详细的说明。总的来说，这篇文章切题，且全文立场保持一致。
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0
这篇文章逻辑结构清晰，包含引言、主体段落和结论。段落划分恰当，能够区分不同的观点。你使用了一些衔接词，如 'However', 'In addition', 和 'First of all' 来引导读者。然而，句子之间的衔接有时显得有些生硬，部分过渡词略显重复。为了提高，请尝试使用更多样化的连接词，并确保指代（例如 'this trend'）始终清晰明确。文章的观点推进总体上易于理解，但使用更高级的衔接手段将提升整体的可读性。
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
你展示了足以应对该任务的词汇量，使用了如 'urbanization', 'industrial development', 和 'sustainability' 等术语。文中出现了一些表达略显生硬的情况，例如 'forge ahead' 或 'contradictions between urban and rural individuals'，这些表达可以更地道一些。虽然你尝试使用了一些不常见的词汇，但在词汇选择和搭配上偶尔会出现错误。为了提高，请专注于学习搭配（即自然组合在一起的词汇），而不仅仅是记忆单个词的同义词。目前的词汇量足以清晰表达你的意思，但还缺乏获得更高分数所需的精确度和灵活性。
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5
这篇文章混合使用了简单句和复杂句。虽然意思表达总体清晰，但存在一些语法错误，例如 'the drawbacks of this trend is'（主谓一致错误）和 'quality of life of people'（缺少冠词）。此外，还有一些标点符号问题，例如逗号后缺少空格。虽然你尝试使用复杂句，但并非完全没有错误。为了提高，请重点关注主谓一致，并校对以减少机械性错误。增加无错误的复杂句的使用频率，将有助于你在这一评分标准中获得更高的分数。
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