Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-06
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.
Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In this fast moving world most individuels are mobilising to cities for batter job opportunities or for a batter life. naturally the number of inhabitants are decreasing on rural side of countries. the following essay discuss both positive and negative growth to reach a concrete decision.
For many moving to city is not an option, its compulsan for batter life, for job or for study. Moreover, cities have batter infrastructure one of the pulling facters afacting migration. Also, low level of publich facelity in rural areas. For example, an individuel first moves to city for batter option forn education then starts working in city because payout and not able to find work in rural area. In addition to this, single homeowner moves with entire family to city
Whare on rural area most people living are fermars or livestock caretakers. In the rural areas moving of lebor afacts on farming productivity, whare on cities this migration afacts housing as for one job oportunity an entire family moves of city.
In my opinion, cities are expanding day by day as local migrant coming to cities for great healthcare or education or work opporetunity which is good as it increases income of family. On other hand it is breaking primary sector like farming livestock manager
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the essay attempts to address both positive and negative aspects, the arguments are underdeveloped and lack sufficient supporting evidence or examples. The position is stated in the introduction but is not consistently maintained or explored in depth throughout the body paragraphs. The conclusion is abrupt and does not effectively synthesize the arguments presented. To improve, you must expand on your points with specific examples and ensure the essay meets the length requirement to allow for a full exploration of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is often disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes repetitive (e.g., 'In addition to this', 'Also'). Some sentences are fragmented or lack clear connections to the preceding ideas, making the flow difficult to follow. For instance, the transition between the discussion of infrastructure and the impact on farming is abrupt. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and there are frequent spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'individuels' for individuals, 'batter' for better, 'facters' for factors, 'publich' for public, and 'facelity' for facility. These errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding. The range of vocabulary is basic and lacks the precision required for a higher band score. To improve, focus on learning the correct spelling of common academic words and try to incorporate a wider range of topic-specific vocabulary related to urbanization and rural development.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('the number of inhabitants are decreasing'), missing articles, and incorrect sentence structures. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the existing sentences are often simple or contain errors that affect clarity. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing commas and periods. To achieve a higher score, you need to focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles before attempting more complex grammatical structures.
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