Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In nowadays the peoples of the many countries migrated to the cities and the population around the country side decreases.

There are many reasons of this problem and the first of all the number of people in many countries getting migeration from rural areas to cities because in village life there are many kinds of problems and fist is that in rural areas no any university , hospital and many other fasilities are less in number as compare to city.

Secondly in village life people need to do much work to earn seek but in big cities many kind of jobs are available and having a job is a easy way to make money. The rural life is more difficult because people lives in the mud made homes and their no any bathroom in that place but in cities all this benifits are provided.

Thirdly the main cause of this thing is in villages every man or woman needs to paid tax to gernment.For example if a farmer want buy any part of land then this man need to pay a high money to office but in cities all the people are independent and they have no need to gave any tax. The roads of the the poor society are in bad condition but the the cities roads are moderns and new.

Fourth reason is that in the cities there are many kinds of shopping malls and people gets all king who they need and in every big city has a airpot if a man want to go to abroad then he hs no need any travel but in villages all this things are not available.

After the analysis according to me the main reason of moving the people is less facilities in rural areas.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing reasons for rural-to-urban migration, but it fails to clearly state a position on whether this is a positive or negative development. The essay focuses entirely on the causes of migration rather than evaluating the impact of the trend. While the ideas are relevant, they are under-developed and lack a balanced perspective. The conclusion merely summarizes the reasons rather than providing a final judgment on the development itself. To improve, you must explicitly state your stance in the introduction and ensure your arguments directly support that position throughout the essay.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay uses basic paragraphing and some linking words like 'first of all', 'secondly', and 'thirdly' to organize ideas. However, the progression of ideas is often mechanical and repetitive. The use of cohesive devices is limited, and some transitions are awkward or inaccurate, such as 'the main cause of this thing is'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the relationship between sentences is not always logical. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of cohesive devices and ensuring that each paragraph flows naturally into the next, rather than relying on a simple list-like structure.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'things', 'people', and 'cities'. There are several instances of incorrect word choice and spelling errors, such as 'migeration', 'fasilities', 'gernment', and 'airpot'. These errors occasionally make the text difficult to follow. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas with precision. To improve, you should practice using more academic synonyms and focus on correct spelling and collocations. Expanding your vocabulary related to urbanization and socio-economic issues would be highly beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('people lives'), incorrect verb forms ('need to paid', 'need to gave'), and missing articles or prepositions ('no any university', 'in nowadays'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma placement. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of errors prevents the text from reaching a higher band. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of modal verbs.

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