Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In many countries, rural population are decreasing as they are moving towards the cities for better life style. this trend has its negative and positive impact. Overall, it seems to be leaning towards negative side if not managed properly.

On the positive side, it has many benifit for the country itself. Urban migration takes place in search of better job, health care, and modern infrastructure which a city is able to provide easily. For example, In india, many young skilled students from rural area moves to advanced cities like Bangalore and Hyderabad for job in IT sectors to improve their living standards. Also, this helps in boosting the economy of the country, Innovation and infrastrcuture development and to take the country to global level.

However, Its negative impacts are also considerable. Rural migration can cause serious effects to such areas and the country. For Instance, moving to cities can effect the agricultural sector where older people are left behind to do such hardwork on their own. Due to migration, other problems like labour shortage and traditional practice may disappear. In Addition, due to increasing migration, cities like mumbai are facing the problems like overcrowed places, Traffic, hike in housing rents and price. slums area in mumbai are facing infrastructure, water, and health problems. At the same time, rural areas faces shortage of young people which increases the gap between rural and urban area.

From my experience, I have seen my relatives moves to bigger cities in search of better job and life quality. left behind the rural areas which are now feels empty.

In conclusion, The migration from rura to ubran brings in opportunity for better job and life style with other benifits like health care, better schooling and easy access to every need. But, this also causes the rural area to degrade in their qualities. To solve such problems, goverment can takes steps to improve the rural areas by developing and investing in health care, schooling, developing job and into other sectors.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both the positive and negative aspects of rural-to-urban migration. You clearly state your position in the introduction and maintain it throughout. The ideas are relevant, such as the economic benefits of skilled labor in cities versus the agricultural decline in rural areas. However, some points could be developed further; for instance, the suggestion for government intervention in the conclusion is a bit brief. To reach a higher band, ensure that each supporting example is fully explained to show its direct impact on the development of the argument.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, each with a clear focus. You use cohesive devices such as 'On the positive side,' 'However,' and 'In conclusion' to guide the reader. While the progression is generally clear, some transitions between sentences are slightly mechanical or repetitive. Additionally, the referencing in the fourth paragraph ('left behind the rural areas which are now feels empty') is a bit disjointed from the previous paragraph. Improving the flow between sentences and ensuring consistent paragraph structure will help achieve a higher score.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'urban migration,' 'infrastructure,' and 'agricultural sector.' However, there are several spelling errors ('benifit,' 'infrastrcuture,' 'overcrowed,' 'rura,' 'ubran') and minor word choice issues ('do such hardwork,' 'are now feels empty'). These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the score. To improve, focus on proofreading for common spelling mistakes and try to incorporate more precise collocations to express your ideas with greater sophistication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this level. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement ('rural population are,' 'rural areas faces,' 'goverment can takes steps') and article usage. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some sentences starting with lowercase letters ('this trend,' 'left behind'). While these errors rarely prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they are frequent enough to impact the overall accuracy score. Focusing on basic subject-verb agreement and sentence-level punctuation will significantly improve your writing.

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