Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-23
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.
Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In many countries around the world there are many rural areas which are the important part of the nation which provide the agricultural products and natural resources .However ,still underdeveloped with inadequate facilities .
Due to inadequate facilities in terms of education, health care , and facilities many countryside people are migrating to cities for the better facilities. Even in the some of areas there is only few hospitals and the schools making it more challenging for the rural people. Another significant issues is limited availability to employment .So first and foremost due to the all this issues more number of population has migrant towards the cities resulting decreased population in the country side which is of course a negative development for the both cities and rural areas .
As it is mentioned before rural areas provide the agricultural products and natural resources which contributes to the national economy. They also ensure to supply food for the population. While rural to urban movement can cause overcrowding in cities area which can increase the gap between rural and urban development. Whenever the growing number of people will shift to ubran areas it may leads to housing shortage and air and noise pollution.
In conclusion for the balance development migration should be controlled.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by identifying the migration as a negative development and providing reasons. However, the essay is significantly under the 250-word minimum requirement, which severely limits the depth of the arguments. While you mention agricultural importance and urban overcrowding, these points are not fully developed or supported with specific examples. The position is clear, but the lack of length prevents a more thorough exploration of the topic, leading to an under-developed response that does not fully satisfy the task requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by the brevity of the content. There is an attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'However', 'Due to', and 'In conclusion', but these are sometimes used mechanically or with grammatical errors (e.g., 'So first and foremost due to the all this issues'). The progression of ideas is somewhat disjointed, and the paragraphing is not fully utilized to separate distinct arguments effectively. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would enhance the overall structure.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but remains quite basic and repetitive. You use terms like 'facilities', 'rural', and 'cities' frequently. There are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'migration should be controlled' (which is a bit vague) and 'the all this issues'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to incorporate more precise, topic-specific vocabulary related to urbanization, socio-economic impacts, and demographic shifts, while ensuring correct word forms and collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('it may leads to'), missing articles ('in the some of areas'), and awkward phrasing ('more number of population has migrant'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like pluralization and verb tense consistency.
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