Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-23
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.
Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In many countries around the world people are moving to urban areas the results has the decreased the number of population in urban area. I believe that the it is a negative development overall, because the both urban and rural area face a many problames.
Major advantages of the moving in urban side is the best facilites provided for people sach as a best education, health care facilities, public transport. they can also have a better pay job in their field. they can acces the better employment and better opportunities. For example the people may move to cities so their living a high standred.
However the disadvantage of the this trend are more significant. it cause the make a more serious issue face in the cities sach as a traffic congustion, increased more population, improve a rent in the house. public place like schools, hospitals, public trasportation may come a under a pressure. secondly rural area face a many difficulties like a lake of the farmers and workers it leads to production of products in the farm may decline. many small bussiness related to agriculture make a decline.
In conclusion, the rural to urban migration may benefiets like a better job opporunities for the people i believe that negative development overall. Governments should improve a facilities in the rural area so they avoid a leave their comminities.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position that rural-to-urban migration is a negative development. However, the essay fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the main arguments regarding urban overcrowding and rural labor shortages are relevant, they remain underdeveloped due to the brevity of the response. The conclusion is present but lacks depth. To improve, you must expand your supporting points with more detailed explanations and specific examples to ensure the response is sufficiently comprehensive.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of ideas. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'Major advantages of the moving in urban side' and 'secondly rural area face a many difficulties'. The transition between ideas is sometimes abrupt, and the referencing is occasionally unclear. While there is a logical flow, the lack of sophisticated linking words and the repetitive structure of sentences hinder the overall coherence of the text. Improving the variety of transition signals will help create a smoother flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'better' and 'many'. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'improve a rent in the house' (instead of 'increase rent') and 'lake of the farmers' (instead of 'lack of farmers'). Spelling errors, such as 'problames', 'sach', and 'bussiness', are also present. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise vocabulary related to the topic of urbanization and ensure that words are used in their correct grammatical context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at complex sentences are frequently marred by grammatical errors. There are persistent issues with subject-verb agreement ('the results has the decreased'), article usage ('a many problames'), and prepositional errors. Punctuation is also inconsistent, which occasionally makes the text difficult to parse. The frequency of these errors is high, which impacts the clarity of your message. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like pluralization and verb tense consistency.
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