Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is widely beleived that in some countries majority of village people are moving to city this is good for rural people for his lifestyle changes more experienced add in his life. , In my opinion that is huge advantages of that and the other hands this impact in agricultural in rural area .

Overall, the village people trading to city area that is good for some people for instance, job marketing, many resturatnts and walking in parking ,that facilities are availible in the city , While in village area there is affect on farming work and agricultural area ,

The advanteges of the people moving from village area to city area ,that is availible more facilities, for instance the availibilty of large amount of jobs ,supermarketing jobs many resturants for guest if any time to order like pizza and burger and parking availible for walking , in late the people walking in that parking . For exaple one month ago i was travelled with my friend in lahore we are celebrating his birthday at 12;00 AM that was memoriable moment for me. in the other hand in village life we celebrating that birthday at 9:00 pm because we are sleeping at 12:00 am. so that advantages in city life people enjoying all events in late time.

The disadvantages of the village people to moving to city there is both side affect on the village and city . the village imact is that there affect on farming side such as agriculture . in the city that is many people in one secter there is a lack of job for residential people and other a lot of disadvantegs pollution raise in the city .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of rural-to-urban migration. However, the development of ideas is limited and often repetitive. For instance, the argument regarding 'facilities' and 'restaurants' is mentioned multiple times without adding depth. The position is somewhat clear, but the lack of cohesive argumentation makes it difficult to follow the writer's stance. The examples provided, such as the personal anecdote about celebrating a birthday in Lahore, are not fully relevant to the broader socio-economic implications of the topic, which limits the quality of the response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is weak. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often mechanical or misused, such as 'on the other hands' and 'in late'. The referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to track the relationship between sentences. The transition between the introduction, body paragraphs, and the conclusion is abrupt. While there is an attempt to structure the essay, the lack of effective linking words and the repetitive nature of the content hinder the overall flow and coherence of the writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'good', 'people', and 'area'. There are frequent spelling errors, such as 'beleived', 'resturatnts', 'availible', and 'advanteges', which occasionally impede readability. The student struggles to use precise terminology related to the topic of urbanization or agriculture. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of variety and the persistent spelling mistakes prevent the response from reaching a higher band. More sophisticated vocabulary related to migration and urban development is needed.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, such as 'In my opinion that is huge advantages of that and the other hands this impact in agricultural in rural area'. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the simple sentences used often contain errors. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and periods. These frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader and indicate a lack of control over basic grammatical rules.

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