Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-28

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In this modern world the migration of people of rural area to urban area is on rise. The major advantage of it is people improve there living standards Although it has benefits it also have drawbacks such as deforestation . This essay intends to detail them in forthcoming paragraphs.

The primary merit of it is help individuals to improve there quality of living. To elucidate, if people who live in village move to big cities they get good education as compare to small towns because they study in well modernize school and colleges in cities which help them to get good jobs in future and it can also leads to improve there living standard because now they earn good money. For example , as per a recently conducted survey by 'National Sample Survey' Organisation a significate proportion of people improve there lifestyle and education by moving to big cities.

The major drawback of it is effecting the environment and climate . To explicate, if a huge percentage of people migrate from village to cities they need house to live and vehicles to move one place to another. Therefore, housing creates the problem of deforestation because government cut tree to get a land where they construct new houses to fulfilled the need of individuals. For instant, as per a recently publish article in 'Times of India' newspaper a huge proportion of green forests are cut to build new homes. Thus, it lead to reduce the amount of oxygen from air and may cause a harmful breading problems.

To conclude, there are certain benefits of this topic such as reduce the percentage of illiterate and it can leads to improve the economy of the country.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of rural-to-urban migration. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention education and economic growth as benefits, and deforestation as a drawback, the arguments lack depth and specific analysis. The conclusion is also quite abrupt and does not fully synthesize the main points discussed in the body paragraphs. To improve, ensure that each point is supported by a more detailed explanation of the 'why' and 'how' rather than just stating the consequence. Your position is clear, but the overall development of the argument needs more sophistication to reach a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices such as 'To elucidate,' 'For example,' and 'To conclude.' However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly unnatural. Additionally, there are instances where the flow between sentences could be smoother. For example, the transition between the discussion of housing and the environmental impact could be better linked to show a stronger causal relationship. Paragraphing is present, but the final paragraph is underdeveloped and lacks a strong concluding statement that summarizes your overall stance on whether this is a positive or negative development.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'migration,' 'deforestation,' and 'significate' (though this is a spelling error). However, there is a lack of precision and some repetitive word choices, such as the frequent use of 'good' and 'improve.' There are also several spelling errors, such as 'there' instead of 'their,' 'significate' instead of 'significant,' and 'breading' instead of 'breathing.' These errors are noticeable but do not necessarily impede communication. To improve, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and double-check your spelling of common words.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, particularly with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'it also have drawbacks,' 'it can also leads to improve') and article usage (e.g., 'in village,' 'cut tree'). While the meaning is generally clear, these persistent errors indicate a lack of control over complex structures. To reach a higher band, you should focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles. Proofreading your work for these basic errors before finishing would significantly improve your score.

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