Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In modern era a huge quantity of population is shifted in the cities leaving their rural areas behind due to various reasons which includes the search of job and better livelihood whereas contains various flaws too. In my perspective it contains many good and many bad effects which are to be discussed in upcoming paragraphs along with my points of view.

It is well known that people find cities as more income generator and better lifestyle it is good in terms of healthcare and finance because it fulfils essential needs of a human at just walking distance as everything is near for examples schools ,hospitals ,parks ,fitness gyms and many more services are provided so it makes people attracted towards cities.

on the other hand village life is a peaceful and easy life due to certain reasons that includes environment and greenery no pollution which would intrupt anyones's health.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response is significantly under-length at 149 words, failing to meet the 250-word minimum requirement. This severely limits the development of ideas. While you introduce the topic and mention both positive and negative aspects, the arguments are underdeveloped and lack sufficient supporting evidence or examples. You mention that cities provide healthcare and finance, but you do not fully explore the implications of this migration on either the cities or the rural areas. To improve, you must expand your points with detailed explanations and relevant examples to ensure the task is fully addressed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into three short paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical, such as 'on the other hand' and 'for examples'. There is a lack of transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs, and the conclusion is entirely missing. The ideas within the paragraphs are presented in a list-like fashion rather than being woven into a coherent argument. To improve, focus on using a wider range of linking words and ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, which limits your ability to convey complex ideas. Phrases like 'huge quantity of population' and 'income generator' are unnatural and imprecise. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'contains various flaws' and 'makes people attracted towards cities'. You rely on simple, everyday language that does not demonstrate the range required for higher bands. To improve, try to incorporate more academic collocations and precise terminology related to urbanization and rural development.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'In modern era a huge quantity of population is shifted' (incorrect article and passive voice usage) and 'no pollution which would intrupt anyones's health' (spelling and punctuation errors). The sentence structures are mostly simple or contain errors when attempting complexity. You need to focus on subject-verb agreement, correct article usage, and accurate punctuation. Practicing complex sentence structures, such as using relative clauses or conditional sentences, will help improve your range.

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