Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-31
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.
Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Nowadays, in numerous countries the global, rural people are moving to cities so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Yes it is a positive impact on the countries. here, I will explain both impact about the population is decreasing as well moving to cities.
To begin with, there are many positive effects of moving rural people moving to cities because first and foremost is that well education and insfrastructure. rural people educ their children. They study in good schools and gets good academic result in the classroom. secondly get more opportunity in job sector. Individual get job in deffect different sectors. They earn and learn from job. The finally in cities people get more facilities of hospitals, transportation, parks, theaters and many more. masses spend their quality time with their friends, neighbours and family member. It is positive impact on moving to the life.
On the other side population is reducing day by day in countryside because farming is not rewarding due to the chemicals, pesticides individuals puts into the land. Land cannot give high earning. Traditional occupation has been to decrease due to the technology. For example, in desert area, infertile area people moving to cities because their land cannot give anything due to less rainfall.
In conclusion, there are more advantages as compare to disadvantage. Mostly people are moving to cities life because they have more opportunities like education, schools, hospitals, etc. transport, whereas in countryside less opportunities. Traditional occupation is also reduced by the help of technology.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by taking a clear position that the migration is a positive development. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you mention education, infrastructure, and job opportunities, these points are presented as a list rather than being fully extended with logical reasoning or specific, illustrative examples. The discussion regarding the countryside is also somewhat brief and lacks depth. To improve, you should focus on explaining 'why' and 'how' these changes occur, rather than simply stating them. Ensure that your arguments are balanced and fully explored to meet the requirements for a higher band score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'first and foremost' and 'secondly'. Some transitions between sentences are abrupt, and the logical flow within paragraphs is hindered by fragmented phrasing. For example, the transition from the benefits of city life to the reasons for rural decline is quite sudden. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would significantly enhance the overall coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is generally basic and repetitive. There are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'well education', 'educ their children', and 'deffect different sectors'. These errors occasionally make the meaning unclear. While you attempt to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'infrastructure' and 'pesticides', the range is limited, and the lack of precision prevents a higher score. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and using more precise academic vocabulary to express your ideas more naturally and effectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('Individual get job'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are simple or contain fragments, and there is a lack of complex sentence structures. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of capital letters and commas. These errors are frequent and sometimes impede the reader's ability to follow your argument. To reach a higher band, you need to work on basic sentence construction, verb tenses, and the accurate use of articles and prepositions.
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