Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Now a days in many countries citizens moving to big cities, so the percentage of population is decreasing day by day in countryside . So it is negtive develpment. In upcoming paragraphs i will discuss reasons related to it.

To begin with, There are to much bad effect of when peoples shift in cities , firstly, Jobs are limted in cities so peoples start crime for completing their needs , traffic jam are increasing day by day in cities beacuse persons are move in cities. According to Google In every Year 40% perrsons will be shift in big cities.

Moreover, When persons are Moving to cities then they use bike, cars and other vechile as a result air pollution are increasing in cities and some health problems are also started .For example, 54% citizen were deffected with health issues like as asthma, skin problems,lungs issues and other problems.

peoples find jobs in cities but they can not find it after finded they thing about suicide beacause they fail in there in life .

for example , All most children are moving to cities for bright future but some time they do not give bright future to them self

In conclusion, There are maney bad results of moving in cities so i mention these bad effect in above paragraphs.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you clearly state your position that rural-to-urban migration is a negative development, the arguments provided are underdeveloped and lack sufficient supporting evidence. The points regarding crime, traffic, and health are mentioned but not explored with the depth required for a higher band. Furthermore, the inclusion of statistics (e.g., '40% perrsons', '54% citizen') appears unsupported and lacks context. To improve, you must expand on your reasoning with logical explanations and concrete examples, ensuring the essay reaches the required length.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. While you use some cohesive devices like 'To begin with' and 'Moreover', their usage is often mechanical or grammatically incorrect. The transition between ideas is frequently abrupt, and the lack of clear topic sentences makes it difficult to follow the argument. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the concluding paragraph merely repeats the prompt rather than summarizing the main points effectively. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed idea will help improve the flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic terms. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'citizens moving' instead of 'people migrating' and 'deffected with health issues'. Spelling errors are pervasive throughout the text, including 'negtive', 'develpment', 'vechile', and 'maney'. These errors occasionally impede communication. To reach a higher band, you need to expand your vocabulary to include more precise, academic terminology and focus on accurate spelling and word formation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with frequent errors in subject-verb agreement, article usage, and tense. Examples include 'there are to much bad effect', 'peoples shift', and 'air pollution are increasing'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas and periods. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the errors are frequent enough to cause difficulty for the reader. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles before attempting more complex grammatical structures.

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