Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-04
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.
Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
These in few countries around the world rural human are go to cities so what population in the country side is decreasing that a positive development i will discuss both views in upcoming peragraph proper with reason
To commence with they will discribed these main point of moving to cities on people city life is very different on them they can provide all things very quickly and fast to easily like school college supermarket hospital and all life used thing will buy quickly so these wether and beauty of him attractive views and park so imprissave for instance they provide best fature on children in city will train teacher all thing knowledge learn children on different platform easy method learn new track and kind of learning student understand cool mind such as a one repot on uk city life imprassive and learning rato increasing day by day on countryside population go on city
On the other hand negative inpect on city because they can provide new skill and job on will knowledge person and earn high money or spote your family all kind and dfferent time bad experience can learn new skill very working your life but they can trust these again person not easily life will provide a good lesson these day anything just time pass so what save you these person for example uk country very paid on education system new track on learning children and spote family and country other them so the population countryside is decreasing these reasion
In conclusion many around they world move on city well fature on earn money so these reasion population in the countryside id decreasing day by day
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the prompt but fails to maintain a clear position. While you mention that you will discuss both views, the arguments provided are fragmented and lack logical development. The ideas regarding city life (e.g., 'school college supermarket hospital') are listed rather than explained, and the connection to the prompt's core issue—the impact of rural-to-urban migration—is often lost. The conclusion does not clearly state whether you believe this is a positive or negative development, which is a requirement of the task. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single, well-supported argument that directly answers the question asked.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a clear structure. While there are paragraph breaks, the progression of ideas is difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'so' and 'these'. The transition between sentences is often abrupt, making it hard for the reader to understand the relationship between your points. For example, the shift from discussing city amenities to the 'negative inpect' is confusing. To improve, use linking words like 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'however' to connect your ideas logically and ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate, which frequently impedes communication. Many words are misused or misspelled, such as 'imprissave' for 'impressive', 'fature' for 'features', and 'inpect' for 'impact'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas, relying on basic, repetitive terms. To reach a higher band, you need to focus on learning collocations and using more precise academic vocabulary. Avoid using informal or fragmented phrasing; instead, try to build your sentences using more varied and accurate terminology related to urbanisation and social development.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that make the text difficult to read. There are significant issues with sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and word order (e.g., 'These in few countries around the world rural human are go to cities'). Punctuation is largely absent, leading to run-on sentences that lack clarity. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and practice using correct tense forms consistently throughout your writing.
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