Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The growing influence of urbanization on rural people are moving in the cities and such has sparked the various debates. This issue is particularly significant because its impact affect individuals and communities in multiple ways. In this essay, will discuss positive and negative aspect of population in the countryside is decreasing and their implication for society.

One of the key benefits the people village move cities first employment should be provided a better education. Education is important in humans life. The government provide the other facilities as a health care, transport, clean road, jobs and clean water, and some cities provide a free daily transport and as the Pakistan government free electric bus is that promotes

and process to antilog service of opportunities. There is also evident increases factories and other private companies are provide a high salaries jobs. Helps improving understanding, tolerance and problem solving methods. As shown various studies the cities open the new business as fast food, workshop, electric car, showroom and motorcycle business.

but disadvantage headingly appear the needy business it border However, despite the benefits government should not provide countryside of more facilities jobs, facil life is very easy pass and city life is very hard. More traffic, pollution, traffic volume and very problem is cities life. The government should be

provide equal life those who clean road, clean water and other opportunities should provide.

In conclusion moving in the cities provide education, better jobs, hospitals and is significant advantage notable challenges and its depends impact on how effectively it is managed for society.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both the benefits and drawbacks of urbanization. However, the position is not consistently clear throughout the essay. While you mention both sides, the development of ideas is often fragmented and lacks logical depth. For instance, the discussion on 'employment' and 'education' is introduced but not fully explained or linked back to the core question of whether this is a positive or negative development. The conclusion is also quite brief and does not effectively synthesize the arguments presented. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that directly supports your overall stance.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression of ideas is frequently interrupted by disjointed sentences and unclear transitions. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as the abrupt transition 'but disadvantage headingly appear the needy business it border'. Referencing is sometimes confusing, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of your argument. To improve, focus on using linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'on the other hand') more naturally to connect your ideas and ensure that each sentence logically follows the previous one.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, which restricts your ability to convey complex ideas. There are several instances of awkward word choices and incorrect collocations, such as 'needy business' and 'headingly appear'. Some phrases are difficult to interpret due to non-standard usage, such as 'antilog service of opportunities'. While you attempt to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'urbanization' and 'infrastructure', the lack of precision in your word choice often impedes clarity. Expanding your range of synonyms and focusing on learning common collocations will help you express your points more effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often make the meaning unclear. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the population... are moving', 'impact affect'), missing articles, and incorrect sentence structures. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, which disrupts the reading process. While you attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty, leading to a lack of control over grammar. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subjects and verbs agree, and proofreading for common errors like missing prepositions and incorrect verb tenses.

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