Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In todays changing economic, many people noticed the imigration of population to urban area from rural sides of the country. There is a mixed opinion on this trend, I will discuss both the sides and In this essay and I will give my opinion.

Todays developing world many mayor cities are facing a labour shortage around the world, many people moving to urban area will some how help to tackle the shortage. By having more people in trade will boost cities overall growth and devlopment of the countries. In todays world Contries financial growth is the most important factor foo any country to be

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Recognized In global market.

Moving people from rural area will help count country to grow drastically.

In todays changging weather rainfall has become very uncertain. While country side population, heavily reta dependent of on farming and cultivating bussiness, they have to face many challanges. Because of that In recent years world have seen drastical increment In farmer suicides. If people be a person who is being affected from Weather chang can move to urban area for work it would be beneficial for individual.

While on the otherside, Because because many people moving from to urban area, there is a noticable decray decrease in farming, forming, If this trend countinues, would might see huge food shortage. Many people believe thouge increasing density in cities, government needs to wipe out huge amount of forest to meet housing needs for land and bulling building materials which is also affecting local enviorounment as well.

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To samup, population to their respective place is important on their own place. By moving to urban place individual can help countries to grow but government needs to help people to stay in rural area for farming to meet countries food requirment. By subsidies overall moving trend to urban area have a positive impact but population in rural area is as important.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both the positive and negative aspects of rural-to-urban migration. However, the development of ideas is inconsistent. While you mention economic growth and the challenges of farming, the arguments are often fragmented and lack depth. The conclusion attempts to summarize, but the phrasing is repetitive and unclear, making it difficult to follow your final stance. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on one clear main idea supported by a specific example or logical explanation, and maintain a consistent position throughout the essay.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical flow is frequently interrupted by disjointed sentences and unclear transitions. Phrases like 'To sumap place is place' and the repetitive 'To samup' at the end indicate a lack of control over cohesive devices. Referencing is often confusing, and the progression of ideas within paragraphs is not always smooth. To reach a higher band, focus on using linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'on the other hand') more accurately and ensure that each sentence logically follows the previous one.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is generally limited and repetitive. There are numerous spelling errors (e.g., 'imigration', 'devlopment', 'Contries', 'decray', 'enviorounment') and word-choice inaccuracies (e.g., 'rural sides', 'forming' instead of 'farming', 'bulling' instead of 'building'). While you attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary, the frequent errors and misuse of words occasionally impede the reader's understanding. Expanding your vocabulary through reading and focusing on correct spelling and collocations will help you convey your ideas more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('world have seen'), incorrect sentence structure, and punctuation mistakes. Many sentences are fragmented or lack necessary articles and prepositions. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty, which causes difficulty for the reader. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree, and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb tenses.

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