Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Migration around globe is increasing on a daily basis. people are moving from villages to cities for better life.However it is the positive aspects by moving forward in the fast pace of life for the future .

There are several aspects of it firstly in rural areas lack of education .As we compare the population in countryside or rural we can see the huge differents in between them. There for many students are taking risk to commute for higher education toward cities.Secondly poor facilities are available in villages many people are from poor backgroung they are earning in pennies and goverment does'nt care about there health .

Moreover another reason is about the ifrastrute and d

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response is significantly under-length, containing only 116 words compared to the required 250-word minimum. This severely impacts task achievement, as the prompt's requirements cannot be fully met within such a short space. The student attempts to address the prompt by expressing a view that rural-to-urban migration is a positive development and outlines some reasons, such as a lack of education and poor facilities in villages. However, these ideas are left very underdeveloped and incomplete, trailing off mid-sentence at the end of the text. Due to the extreme brevity and lack of full development, the response falls into the Band 4 descriptor range.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text shows some basic attempts at organisation with introductory and transitional markers like 'firstly', 'Secondly', and 'Moreover'. However, the overall progression of ideas is heavily disrupted by incomplete sentences and fragmented thoughts, such as cutting off at 'is about the ifrastrute and d'. Paragraphing is also problematic, with the response crammed into poorly structured blocks. Referencing and cohesive devices are inadequate and mechanical, making the flow difficult to follow. These features align closely with Band 4 descriptors, where information and ideas are not arranged coherently enough for higher bands.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, featuring phrases like 'better life', 'fast pace of life', and 'poor background'. There are noticeable word choice and spelling errors throughout the text, including 'differents', 'backgroung', 'goverment', 'does'nt', and 'ifrastrute'. These errors, combined with a very limited range of vocabulary, strain the reader's understanding and reflect the characteristics of Band 4, where vocabulary is basic and repetitive with frequent errors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying mostly on simple or faulty sentence structures. There are frequent and severe grammatical errors, such as missing articles, incorrect punctuation, and sentence fragments (e.g., 'However it is the positive aspects by moving forward...'). The response ends abruptly with an incomplete sentence, demonstrating a lack of control over basic sentence construction. Because errors are frequent, distort meaning in places, and impede communication, the performance matches Band 4.

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