Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In the modern era, in many nations around the world. countryside people are started shifiting to urban area, so that due that in the rural area population is decreasing nowdays. In my opinion, benefitcs are outweigh then drawbacks because all kinds of modern facilities are easily available in cities like internet, public transport, amentities and many more things.

Initially, People are agrue that population in the countryside are reduces due to people moving in cities because they want to adapt luxury lifestyle with all new facilities and comfort due that in countryside there are reduction of framers and less popluation. some people are not ready to move to there thoughts like they believe that they could'nt adjust in cities there are connected with natural environment so that they can not able to tolerate overcoweded place and traffic congestion. And also they feel rural area are more healthier and safe atmosphere as compared to cities.

On the other hand, Some people are moving to cities because of there thoughtfull nature to adpat new and more covienent lifestyle likewise school, hospital, public transport are also easily available. On ofthe main reason is more job opportunities and beter shelterment for their families and they also able to explore facilities and amenities at one place. They can live in luxury house. And also learn foregin language in better version with daily conversation and confident so that they could not face difficuities during interviews for jobs.

In conclusion, Although, rural people are moving in cities is good decision to improve their lifestyle and followed the real-world and tend. But also need to connected with their countryside house and visited during weekends is good option to balance both sides of houses.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by expressing a clear position that the benefits of rural-to-urban migration outweigh the drawbacks. The writer attempts to support this viewpoint by mentioning modern facilities, internet, public transport, and job opportunities in cities. However, the development of ideas is limited and repetitive. For instance, the second paragraph mentions lifestyle changes and farming reduction, but the arguments remain somewhat undeveloped and are obscured by frequent mechanical errors in expression. While all parts of the task are addressed, the lack of fully extended supporting arguments places this response firmly at Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into four paragraphs, showing a basic attempt at structural organisation with an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, overall progression is hindered by repetitive phrasing and awkward transitions (e.g., 'Initially, People are agrue', 'On the other hand, Some people'). Cohesive devices are frequently inadequate, inaccurate, or overused, and referencing is often unclear, such as the sudden shift in perspectives within the body paragraphs. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion fails to create a smooth, logical flow, resulting in a Band 5.0 performance for this criterion.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and basic, with frequent lexical errors that occasionally cause strain for the reader. Examples include non-standard formations like 'benefitcs', 'amentities', 'shelterment', 'foregin', and 'overcoweded'. While the writer attempts some less common vocabulary such as 'luxury lifestyle', 'traffic congestion', and 'job opportunities', the high density of spelling and word-choice inaccuracies prevents the response from achieving a higher band. The lexical range is minimally adequate for addressing the topic, justifying a score of 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the essay, with a very limited range of structures and frequent errors. Many sentences are non-standard or fragmented, such as 'countryside people are started shifiting to urban area, so that due that in the rural area population is decreasing nowdays.' There is a heavy presence of run-on sentences, incorrect verb forms ('are started shifiting', 'could'nt adjust'), and faulty preposition use. Complex sentences are attempted but are almost always faulty. Because errors are frequent and constantly impede fluency and clarity, a band score of 4.0 is appropriate here.

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