Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

It is argued that around the world amny countries are moved to rural areas to cities for spending a life with all facilities and the population of countryside is not decreasing. Iam disagree with this statement of essay.

The paramount reason is that people move to city for spent more advanced life. Rich people sale their properties to move cities and make a villa in the good society of cities for enjoying all the facilities that is provide in city. in City , also provide good hospital with trained doctors and opend 24/7. in cities there a good education system with educated staff or teacher. Every facilities provides in the corner of every societies. People are live in cities are well-educated and mannerable. travelling are easy i n cities they travell on their bikes, cars and local buses. summer seson is not feel i the city because an AC in every building and room is have that is used to make cooled.

Take an expamle of Pakistan, in which many citeis are found to spending advnce life and feeling like millioners. They want to their children live in society that is profitable for their communication skills and spending lives.

On the other hand in rural areas , is also be a good to spent life. Rural people are happy in every stage of life. They are connected with everyone and ask to their condition of health and wealth. They helps each other. Rural areas is not contributes a good facilities of advance technology and they still happy. There have not a good hospital, school and resturants but they are happy in their daily routine activites. they are farming to eat. They are healthy and fit as compared to cities people because they get up early in the morning and pray fajar. After they praying God good to their field to farming and take break fast their.

Take an example of pakistan rural areas is playing most imporatant role. Pakistan is an agriculture country with the helps of farmers. Pakistani govenment do extra work to grew up agriculture industry. They distributes Tracters, advance machines, etc

In conclusion, cities is contain good facilities as compared to rural areas but cities are more pollution appeared. Rural areas have many facities but cities most.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to address the prompt by discussing both the urban and rural perspectives, although the writer's position remains somewhat confusing at the start, stating 'Iam disagree with this statement of essay.' The ideas are somewhat relevant, touching upon healthcare, education, and lifestyle in cities versus rural community ties and agriculture. However, many of the ideas are underdeveloped, repetitive, or rely on unsupported generalizations, such as claiming that 'summer seson is not feel i in the city because an AC in every building and room is have'. Furthermore, the core question asks whether rural migration is a positive or negative development, which is answered in a very convoluted manner. Based on these descriptors, the response meets the criteria for Band 5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, including an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, showing some basic organizational structure. However, there is a lack of overall progression and clear logical links between sentences and paragraphs. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or repetitively, such as the constant use of 'Take an example of' and abrupt transitions like 'On the other hand in rural areas , is also be a good to spent life.' Referencing and substitution are frequently faulty, leading to a disjointed reading experience. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is weak. These features place the response firmly in Band 5.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently impeded by severe word choice and spelling errors (e.g., 'amny', 'sale' instead of 'sell', 'expamle', 'citeis', 'govenment', 'grew up' instead of 'grow'). While the student attempts some less common topics related to urban amenities and agriculture, the lexical control is weak, with frequent errors that cause strain and confusion for the reader (e.g., 'feeling like millioners', 'mannerable'). The range is limited and only minimally adequate to express basic ideas. This aligns with a Band 4.5, rounded to Band 5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical structures attempted are largely restricted to simple and error-prone complex sentences. There are frequent and systematic errors in tense, subject-verb agreement, articles, and prepositions (e.g., 'people are move', 'that is provide in city', 'in City , also provide', 'There have not a good hospital'). Complex structures are attempted but are almost always faulty (e.g., 'an AC in every building and room is have that is used to make cooled'). These frequent errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader and severely limit the range of structures, placing the essay in Band 4.

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