Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In the today's world, most of the individuals are migrate from villages to urban areas for the different purposes the result of this population of the rural area are started to decrease . as per my point of view this situation impact on the city as a negative way .

To begin with why people move from the rural area to urban area because in the villages all the facilities are not available as they need . for the full fill of their needs many of people think to migrate urban area .to to due this cities face many problems . their are many thing which are impacted with the higher population the first one is lack of empty places , all the empty places are covered with the houses and buildings which results the parks and natural places are losses day by day.

secondly, pollution will increase day by day because the indiviulas uses vehicles for reaching destination. increasing the population will increase the pollution . on the other hands roads are always jam due to more traffic . people face this situation day by day with the large population . there are many other problems arise like rent is increase with high demand of the accomodation its arise a problem for low wages people .

at the end ,I want to say that there are two sides , firstly its is benefical for the person who are migrate from rural to urban area , secondly it create a lots of problem for the city people and for urban area .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses the prompt by discussing the negative impacts of rural-to-urban migration on cities, such as environmental degradation, traffic congestion, and housing issues. The writer's position is clear from the beginning, stating that this is a negative development for cities. However, the ideas are somewhat limited and lack deep extension. While the writer mentions the loss of green spaces and increased pollution, these points are repetitive and underdeveloped. The scope of the essay focuses heavily on city problems while largely ignoring the broader implications for the countryside, as mentioned in the prompt. Nevertheless, all parts of the task are addressed, earning a Band 5.5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, including an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the logical progression is weak, and the overall organization feels disjointed. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, with frequent reliance on basic linkers like 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'at the end'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the sentence 'to to due this cities face many problems', which disrupts the flow of the text. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks clear thematic unity, leading to a score of 5.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently reusing terms like 'population', 'cities', and 'villages'. There are noticeable lexical errors and awkward word choices, such as 'full fill' instead of 'fulfil', 'empty places' instead of 'open spaces', and 'losses day by day' instead of 'disappearing'. Spelling errors are also present, such as 'indiviulas' and 'benefical'. The range of vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey the basic message, but the frequent inaccuracies place it at a Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and faulty attempts at complex forms. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as missing auxiliary verbs ('are migrate'), incorrect prepositions, and structural fragments like 'In the today's world, most of the individuals are migrate'. Punctuation is also weak, with run-on sentences and comma splices throughout the response. Because errors are frequent and occasionally cause difficulty for the reader in untangling the intended meaning, the grammar fits the Band 5.0 descriptors.

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