Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

All countries have both types of territory, city and village. worldwide, in numerous countries the villagers are migrate to the robotic cities. I personally think that shifting of rural commities into well devloped city provides more benefits.

this paragraph will throw some lights on positive effect of people who move to the cities. To begin with, Sophisticated city has so many platform to provide empolyement Therefore unemplyed citizens who moved into city so they can easily get job opportunity. Secondly, the way of living and working into the metropolis gives better quality of lifestyle. Furthermore, Individual get heigher amount of income in urban area so that easily fulfill all the requirements. For instence, in village someone need emergency support then it is to critical to find an option in that kind of situation, rather than in city due to any emergency occurs then there is all kind of aminities are provided by goverment as well as private companies.

Another significant feature is, Universities of urban areas are giving better education and other teaching facilities. Along with institutions provides scholerships to the students so rural candidates get chance to complete their graduation. Moreover, there are many branches to lern new skills and it helps to improve personal background. As an epitome, vocational classess, communication courses, Art classess and computer course,exectra. Even though, If companies publish larger requirements of workers then one adavantage is unemployement of the city is gradually reduce and another one is its engross the economical growth of the nation.

To conclude, There are more positive results of moving villeger to the urban city. And the city and migrates both have their own benefits such as, Improving in the life of rural citizen by getting better job. On other hand cities get easily rise the economy.So that i personally believe that shifting from rural area to city area its gives you wider range of opportunity and there are more possitive effects.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The student addresses the prompt by clearly taking a position that the movement of rural people to cities is a positive development. Key ideas such as employment opportunities, lifestyle improvements, and better educational facilities are introduced to support this stance. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited and lacks depth or specific real-world examples. For instance, the mention of amenities in cities versus villages is kept quite general without fully exploring the socio-economic impacts. While the task is adequately addressed, the arguments remain at a somewhat superficial level, fitting the descriptors for Band 5.5 to 6.0. The ideas are relevant and support the overall thesis, but greater elaboration and specific examples would be needed to push into the higher bands.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response displays an overall logical arrangement with clear paragraphing, dividing the introduction, body paragraphs addressing different aspects of the topic, and a conclusion. Cohesive devices are used to connect ideas, such as 'To begin with', 'Secondly', and 'Furthermore'. However, referencing and transitions are at times faulty or mechanical, as seen in 'this paragraph will throw some lights' and repetitive introductory phrases. Paragraph transitions could be smoother, and some sentences feel disjointed. Despite these weaknesses, the progression of ideas is generally clear, matching the criteria for a Band 5.5 or 6.0 score.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, allowing the student to communicate basic arguments about employment, education, and lifestyle. There are attempts to use less common vocabulary, such as 'sophisticated', 'metropolis', and 'amenities', but these are often accompanied by word choice errors, awkward collocations, or spelling mistakes, such as 'devloped', 'empolyement', 'lern', and 'exectra'. These errors do not seriously impede communication, but they highlight limitations in lexical control. The range is sufficient to convey the main points, earning a Band 5.5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The student demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, though complex structures are frequently faulty. There are frequent grammatical and punctuation errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('villagers are migrate', 'Individual get'), incorrect tense usage ('if companies publish... unemployement... is gradually reduce'), and missing articles. While these errors rarely completely impede understanding, their high frequency affects the overall readability and accuracy of the writing. This performance aligns with the Band 5.0 descriptors.

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