Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.
Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
At present, the rural people are going into cities because the people want to live in better life style. In many nations around the world, rural citizen are shift to urban areas, so the citizens in the countryside is less. From my prespecttive, the people are move into cities is good for life.
To begin with, the village people are move in the urabn areas for better life style. The people are raised in the urban areas so people are life is improve day by day. Furthermore the population are shift in the cities for better education. The people are going in the city and learn good education. For example, A person go in the city and achieve all the eduaction facilities due to this, person education base is strong.
In addition, the citizens are move in the develop areas and take all the hospital facilities. The people are livING in urban areas and easily took the better facilities for health Such as a person is sick in late night and easily move into the haspital because the hospital is near of the home. Moreover people is much facilities are take in the urban areas. The citizens are take all the better facilities in the cities.
The people live in urban areas and take all better facilities such as better life style, health and education. The people are easily to achieve all facilties because people live in cities.
In conclusion, the rural population are shift in cities for good life style. The people are shift in the urban areas and take all the health things.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by expressing a clear position that the rural-to-urban shift is a positive development, mainly citing better lifestyles, education, and healthcare as reasons. However, the development of ideas is limited and repetitive throughout the essay. Sentences like 'The people live in urban areas and take all better facilities' are restated multiple times without introducing new supporting evidence or deep elaboration. This tendency towards repetition and under-development places the response comfortably at Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
Paragraphing is attempted, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the overall progression is heavily hindered by repetitive phrasing and a lack of varied cohesive devices. Basic linkers such as 'To begin with', 'In addition', and 'In conclusion' are used, but referencing is frequently unclear, as seen with ambiguous pronouns ('A person go in the city... due to this, person education base is strong'). The relationships between sentences often feel mechanical and disjointed, aligning with the Band 5 descriptor.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive. Words like 'people', 'better', and 'facilities' are overused across the entire response. There are also frequent word-choice and collocation errors, such as 'rural citizen are shift', 'better life style' (instead of lifestyle), and 'hospital facilities'. While the meaning is generally discernible, the narrow range and frequent lexical inaccuracies mean the response cannot reach Band 6, fitting best at Band 4.5, which rounds to 5.0 in standard holistic assessment guidelines, or strictly Band 4.5 based on basic, repetitive vocabulary. We award 4.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The writing relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex formations are generally faulty. There are constant grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('rural citizen are shift', 'the citizens... is less'), tense errors ('the people are livING'), and missing articles. Punctuation is basic. Because errors are frequent, strain the reader, and distort grammatical rules across nearly every sentence, the grammar corresponds to Band 4.0.
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