Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.
Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
In many countries peole move to cites from rural for better life but the both live are their postive impacts and also disadvantages,The rural life also have good things to live , people who go to main cites have their own reasons to leave the rural but in my point of view, rural life is better then city life , in this easy i give you many reasons to prove my point of view.
I totally agree on that, both lives have their own charm like rural area have many things,for example there are pure food ,organic items available, on the other hand there are fresh air everywhere green trees and plants, also in rural area people live a very simple life, wear simple cloths.
On the other side the city life have their own postive and negative sides now here i discuss few one like in big cites have many devlopment for example,there are many good eduactional insitute and medical department also their are many facilities are avilable which is not in rural side.
The people have less facilities in rural thats why they move to cities for better life. they move their childern for bfor etter future and on the other hand if any medically emergency occur then they are easily reached the hospital for first aid.
In many countries, the goverment try to improve the rural lives and give them best facilities and fulfill their basic need like development start make the good eduactional insitute and best hospital for treatment . the rural and city life both are impotant for country ,both play are important role in econemy, it is negvative impact on the country many people are move to city and leave the rural its effect the aggricultre and many other thingd . the city life also effect because increase the poplation and on other side it badly effect the de
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing the movement of people from rural areas to cities and giving a personal perspective that rural life is better. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. The writer mentions positive aspects of rural life, such as pure food and fresh air, and city advantages like educational institutes and medical facilities, but these points are under-developed. Furthermore, the final paragraph attempts to explain the negative consequences on the country's economy, agriculture, and urban population pressure, but the abrupt ending leaves the thought incomplete. The position is stated at the beginning, but the overall task coverage lacks clear, extended support, placing the response firmly at Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response displays some organization with clear paragraphs attempting to separate different aspects of the topic, such as rural life versus city advantages. However, there is no clear overall progression, and the flow is frequently disrupted by poor punctuation and a lack of proper cohesive devices. Run-on sentences and comma splices are common, as seen in expressions like '...for better life but the both live are their postive impacts and also disadvantages,The rural life also have good things to live...'. Reference words are sometimes unclear or repetitive, and paragraphing is irregular, particularly with the final thought trailing off abruptly. These issues prevent the essay from achieving a higher coherence score, warranting a Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 for its basic structural attempt.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently relying on simple words like 'good', 'better', 'life', and 'things'. There are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, including 'peole' for people, 'cites' for cities, 'postive' for positive, 'cloths' for clothes, 'devlopment' for development, 'eduactional' for educational, 'insitute' for institute, 'avliable' available, 'goverment' for government, 'impotant' for important, 'econemy' for economy, 'negvative' for negative, 'aggricultre' for agriculture, and 'poplation' for population. While meaning is generally conveyed despite these errors, the limited range and frequent inaccuracies constrain the lexical score to Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple and coordinate clauses joined by commas or basic conjunctions. Attempts at complex sentences are consistently faulty, marred by missing verb forms, incorrect subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the both live are', 'city life have'), and missing articles. Punctuation is weak, featuring frequent comma splices and incorrect capitalization. Grammatical errors are pervasive throughout every sentence and frequently impede readability, making it necessary to read sections multiple times to discern the intended meaning. This performance aligns with the Band 4.0 descriptors.
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