Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Nowadays, there is rising urbanisation, meaning people are increasingly moving towards the cities from their rural towns, globally. And this development is more negative in my opinion, due to the following mentioned reasons.

Firstly, this urbanisation creates excessive road congestion in the cities, because in developing nations like Pakistan there is insufficient infrastructure in cities to handle masses' transporation.

For instance, in karachi there are not adequate methods of public transporation eg; trams or metros, hence people moving into karachi from their hometowns have to bring their private vehicles for commuting, therefore it increases road traffic problem, and as a result people spend hours facing these congestions on road daily. This time wastage of individuals while stucking in traffic daily has opportunity cost of doing something productive eg ; reading infromative books, so that knowledge about recent global developments can be gained.

Secondly, this redcution in town populations can futher lead to under-developed towns in countries with high urbanisation. This is because that, in countries like Pakistan government allocates funds among regions on the basis of their population, and as this increased migration in cities is happening, so public funds allocation into coutryside areas will be compromised due to reduced number of villagers. As a result, the local councils will be having insufficient funds to either build or maintain existing government hospitals,educational centres etc, which will eventually affect the development and living standards for those belonging to the small towns.

On the other hand, this development of increasing urbanisation can be supported too, because in cases of families, whose children want to enroll in higher studies, but they lack institues at their towns, so it becomes a sensible decsion for such households to move to cities for better studies and professio

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you consider rural-to-urban migration a negative development, and you support this with relevant points about congestion and the weakening of rural services. The Karachi example gives the first argument a concrete context, while the discussion of reduced public funding explains a possible effect on hospitals and education. You also acknowledge a potential benefit—access to higher education—so the response addresses both sides of the question. However, this counterargument is only briefly introduced and is cut off before its explanation is complete, and the main arguments would benefit from more precise support and a fuller concluding judgement. Develop the education point and clearly weigh it against the disadvantages to make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two paragraphs supporting your view, and a paragraph acknowledging an opposing perspective. Sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “On the other hand” help readers follow the main stages. However, some connections feel mechanical, and several sentences carry too many linked ideas, particularly the long Karachi example. Phrases such as “because … and as … so” make relationships less clear, while “this development” can refer broadly to several different aspects of migration. The final paragraph also ends abruptly, leaving the overall progression incomplete. Use clearer sentence boundaries, vary linking methods, and finish with a conclusion that restates your position and synthesises the arguments.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of topic-related vocabulary, including “urbanisation,” “road congestion,” “public funds allocation,” and “living standards.” These choices allow you to discuss both city pressures and rural consequences, and some less common expressions show an effort to be precise. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, such as “masses’ transportation,” “time wastage,” and “stucking in traffic.” There are also spelling errors, including “transporation,” “redcution,” and “infromative,” which reduce the overall control of vocabulary. Aim for natural collocations and check spelling carefully; for example, describe people as “large numbers of commuters” and say they are “stuck in traffic.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including clauses of reason and result, as in the explanation of how migration may affect rural funding. The main meaning is generally understandable, but some grammatical errors and punctuation problems remain. For example, “because in cases of families, whose children want to enroll” has an awkward clause structure, and “the local councils will be having insufficient funds” uses an unnecessarily complex future form. Several sentences are joined with multiple conjunctions, making their structure difficult to control, and punctuation around examples is inconsistent. Practise building complex sentences with one clear main clause and carefully attached supporting clauses. More accurate clause structure, verb forms, and sentence punctuation would improve clarity.

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