Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nawadays many people are moving from rural area to cities in search of better opportunaties. As a result population of county sides is dicreacing .In my opinion ,it is create negative impact for both urban and rural areas.

There are some reason to move cities from rural area.Cites give them more opportunaties from rural areas.When people came to cites they couldn`t find jobs,house,and extra facilites as a new in this time they create traffice jam and unemployment. Becouse many young and educated person when they want to live in rural erea they cann`t find a job and earning side thatwhy they always to leave countyside and moving cites.For this reason, faming and others local areas people suffer it very much.

Another negative impact is that cites become crowded.When many people move in urban areas, In this time village may become less then devolopment becouse all young people run for cites.Therefore, the goverment should create more job facilities,schools and health care in rural area. The goverment should take also step for young people for finding a job of qualifications and need a step to make devolopment for countryside. As if all person can do hard work and build their career. At the same time, people don`t move in urban area and they are want to be a career in there village or contryside.

In conclusion, I believe that the movement of rural people to cities is mainly a negative development. Although people can find better opportunities in cities, it can cause overcrowding and reduce the development of rural areas

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you consider rural-to-urban migration negative, and the conclusion restates this view. You also identify relevant effects, including urban crowding and reduced development in villages, and suggest that governments provide jobs, schools and healthcare in rural areas. However, the reasons are only partly explained. For example, the point that newcomers may struggle to find jobs and housing is not clearly connected to how migration creates unemployment or traffic, and the effect on farming is mentioned without an example or explanation. Develop each main point with a clear cause-and-effect explanation and a specific illustration, such as how the loss of young workers affects local services or food production. This would make the response more fully address the question rather than relying on brief, general claims.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. The paragraphs broadly group related ideas, and linking expressions such as “As a result,” “For this reason” and “In conclusion” help signal relationships. However, progression within the body paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow. The first paragraph moves from opportunities in cities to jobs, housing, traffic, unemployment and farming without clearly showing how each point connects. The second also shifts from crowding to rural development and then to government action. Some transitions are mechanical or unclear, including “In this time” and “Therefore.” Organise each paragraph around one main effect, explain it in sequence, and use clear references and linking phrases to show cause and consequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “overcrowded,” “unemployment,” “health care,” “opportunities” and “development,” so the reader can identify the main subject and your position. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “cities,” “rural area” and “people.” Frequent spelling errors, such as “Nawadays,” “opportunaties,” “dicreacing” and “goverment,” make the writing less clear and reduce the accuracy of your vocabulary. Some combinations are also unnatural, for example “earning side” and “make development.” Build a more precise set of expressions for migration and its effects, and check spelling carefully. Using accurate collocations will help communicate your ideas without requiring the reader to infer your meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a conditional idea in “If all person can do hard work…” and a cause-and-effect structure beginning “When many people move…”. However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors in sentence construction can make relationships between ideas difficult to understand. Examples include “it is create negative impact,” “When people came to cites they couldn`t find jobs,” and “they are want to be a career.” There are also recurring problems with articles, plurals, subject–verb agreement and punctuation, as in “all young people run” and the missing spaces after full stops. Practise building accurate sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check verb forms and agreement before adding subordinate clauses.

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