Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Countryside people are shifting to cities in many countries around the world, This leads to reducing the population in the rural areas. As from my point of view this is the most positive development because people who are reloacting to cities for their bussiness and many other things.

The primary benefit of moving to cities leads to a good life like working in a proffessional environment and chances to getting high salaries as compared to rural cities. In addition there is alot of opportunities and skills to learn that result in to do better thing in their life. Iam giving you my example i moved to city for my education and i experienced a lot of things like getting new opportunites to work and new skill to learn.

Furthermore, people could go outside with their families and enjoying the cities in the nights that reduce there stress. If we talk about the education of cities their education is better than countryside schools and this is the main purpose that most of families shifting for their village to cities for their childrens education. For instance my cousin who lived in village and he studied school but now he wants to do graduation but there is no any university in their town. However he decide to move to city their studies.

Overall, It's a posiitve development that people are moving to cities because people wants to grow there self and to work in professional companies. for their children

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you consider rural-to-urban migration positive, and you give relevant reasons, especially access to employment, education and new skills. The personal example about moving for education and the cousin who cannot attend university locally help connect the argument to real experience. However, the ideas are only partly developed. For example, the claim that city life reduces stress is not explained, and the benefits of professional work and higher salaries are asserted rather than supported with detail. The conclusion is also incomplete, ending with “for their children.” The response is four words below the required minimum, so it does not meet the task’s length requirement. Develop each reason with a clearer explanation or example and finish the conclusion fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs and a concluding statement. “The primary benefit” and “Furthermore” signal the movement between points, and the examples generally follow the claims they illustrate. However, progression is uneven: the first body paragraph combines employment, skills and a personal example, while the second moves between leisure, stress and education without a clear link between them. Some connections are also awkward or unclear, such as “If we talk about the education of cities,” and the final sentence fragment disrupts the ending. Use one main idea per paragraph, connect each example explicitly to its point, and make the conclusion a complete summary of your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “professional environment,” “high salaries,” “opportunities” and “education.” There are also attempts to express more specific concepts, such as “rural areas” and “graduation.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or repetitive, which sometimes makes meaning less clear. Examples include “rural cities” for rural areas, “chances to getting high salaries,” and “grow there self.” Spelling errors such as “reloacting,” “bussiness,” “proffessional” and “opportunites” are noticeable. Build a more accurate set of phrases for migration, employment and education, and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and use clauses with “because,” “that” and “who,” but control is inconsistent. Errors in sentence structure and verb forms occur frequently, as in “people who are reloacting to cities for their bussiness,” which is not a complete explanation, and “people could go outside with their families and enjoying the cities.” Agreement and sentence construction are also problematic in “people wants to grow,” while the final “for their children” is an incomplete fragment. Punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent, particularly the comma splice and capital letter in “world, This.” Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement and parallel verb forms before submitting.

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