Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

This essay will examine the main benefits and drawbacks of interior individuals are migrate to urban, due to this the population in the region-side is fallen and argue that disadvantages of this development. I think its a negative impact in country side because it effect the agricultural depart.

The positive development for this would be employment, life style, and better treatments. The rural people can have a better jobs in cities than villages, same goes with way of living and better Medication. Although this is the right of them to get this in the village as well but, This is what lack of planning looks like by tax consumers.

The negative term for this migration was agricultural recession was driven by a shortage of field workers, which led to a sharp decline in crop cultivation and overall farming activity. Let go with example : The amount of crops 200 farmers can grow in a year varies wildly, but on average, they can produce anywhere from 1 million to over 40 million kilograms of crops annually. and Government use this number to export for making making relation with many countries now let suppose 75 people move to city central now it simple effect to the number of crops and it can disturbed the relations. Endlessly it also effect the prices as demand of crops and produce of this not match and prices can effect middle class bodies.

To conclude, It can be some benefits for rural people how are moving to cites but this is coasting not only a drawback in population in countryside, as well as in import and export industries as well.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You take a position by calling the trend negative and identify a relevant consequence: fewer rural workers may reduce farming and crop production. The discussion of employment, lifestyle and treatment also acknowledges why people move, so the response engages with both sides. However, the positive points are only listed, and the central argument is not consistently explained: the link from fewer crops to international relations and prices is asserted rather than clearly demonstrated. The opening also promises to examine benefits and drawbacks but does not establish a precise argument. To strengthen the response, explain each main point with a clear cause-and-effect chain and a specific, credible example, while keeping your view on the overall impact explicit throughout. This would make the ideas more fully developed and the task more completely addressed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph on possible benefits, a paragraph on disadvantages, and a conclusion. This gives the reader a basic route through the discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven, and some connections are difficult to follow. For example, the move from crop output to government exports and then to “making relation with many countries” is not clearly signposted or explained. Phrases such as “Let go with example” and “Endlessly” do not accurately guide the reader, while “To conclude” provides a useful closing signal. Improve cohesion by organising each paragraph around one main point, using clear links such as “As a result” only where the relationship is logical, and making references explicit so readers can identify what “this” refers to.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “agricultural recession,” “shortage of field workers,” “crop cultivation,” and “demand.” These choices show an effort to discuss economic and farming consequences rather than relying only on basic terms. However, the range is limited by repeated or inaccurate expressions, and some word combinations make the meaning hard to understand: “interior individuals,” “region-side,” “middle class bodies,” and “making relation” are not natural in this context. There are also spelling and word-form problems, including “Medication” and “coasting.” Aim for precise, conventional collocations and check that each word fits its intended meaning. Using a smaller set of accurate terms such as “rural residents,” “agricultural output,” and “trade relations” would make the argument clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a clause beginning “Although this is the right of them…” and a sentence explaining how worker shortages affect farming. However, complex structures are often faulty, and frequent errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries make parts difficult to read. For example, “individuals are migrate” has an incorrect verb pattern, “the population … is fallen” uses the wrong verb form, and “it effect” lacks subject–verb agreement. The long crop-production sentence also joins several ideas without reliable punctuation, while capitalisation is inconsistent. Practise building accurate short sentences first, then combine them with one clear subordinate clause. Check verb forms and agreement, and use full stops to separate distinct claims.

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