Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Its been a long time people has been moving to cities for better life. This increasing the pressure on urban resources. Government should have master plan to handle this situation.

Overall, The trend of migration to cities has been increasing day by day. Villagers are not receivng those facilities that they are demanding therefore to acquire those facilities they move toward cities. Due to this cities population has been increasing.Cities have more industries, hospitals, schools and markets.

In urban areas more job opportunities are available. There is a chance of growth.Number of skilled laboure required here there for people come to gain these facilities. Opportunities attract the skills. When skill person work with organization it benifits both, as person earn incom and company earnd goodwill. With benifites there is also drawbacks rual employee has to bear rent and food expense wihich effect its saving and health.

Rather than job , health is also factor that attract rural residents. Health facilities are also not properly available in rural areas therefore they com to cities for better treatment and checkup.Education also an issue in rural areas. There is limited number of schools and old learning methods that are not helpful in making the students ability better. Universities also not available in the their areas there for they travel to cities.

Due to this cities are now fully populated and conjusted. Pollution and traffic becom the main issue due to overpopulation. Pollution effecting the life of urbon residents badly. Therefore covernment should make a plan of providing opportunities to rural areas so people remain close to their residance

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify relevant reasons for rural-to-urban migration, including employment, healthcare and education, and you mention negative consequences such as congestion, pollution and pressure on urban resources. However, the task asks you to judge whether the development is positive or negative, and your position is not consistently clear: the opening focuses on pressure, while the body also describes benefits without explicitly weighing them. The final recommendation to improve rural opportunities suggests a negative view, but this needs to be stated directly and supported throughout. Several points, such as the benefits of skilled workers to companies, are only briefly explained. Develop fewer reasons in more depth and use specific examples to support your judgement.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure, and the ideas are generally grouped by topic: employment, healthcare and education, followed by urban problems. This gives the reader some sense of organisation. However, progression between points is often abrupt, and the opening and overview repeat the idea that migration is increasing without establishing a clear argument. Linking expressions such as “therefore” and “also” are used repeatedly, sometimes where the relationship between ideas needs clearer explanation. Some sentences run together, for example the discussion of population growth and city facilities. Give each paragraph a clear main point, connect supporting details logically, and use referencing and transitions more precisely.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “job opportunities,” “health facilities,” “overpopulation,” “pollution” and “traffic,” so the main subject is usually understandable. However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or awkward, such as “gain these facilities,” “the skills,” and “rural employee has to bear rent.” Frequent spelling errors—including “receivng,” “benifits,” “conjusted” and “residance”—also make the writing less clear and reduce the precision of your message. Build a more accurate set of collocations for migration and public services, and proofread spelling carefully. Choosing precise phrases will help you explain both the attractions of cities and the costs of moving there.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some complex sentences, particularly when explaining causes with “therefore,” and you use both simple statements and longer explanations. However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in basic sentence construction, verb forms, agreement and punctuation. For example, “Its been a long time people has been moving” has problems with the opening structure and subject–verb agreement, while “This increasing the pressure” lacks a correctly formed verb. Other examples include “cities population has been increasing” and “Pollution effecting the life,” where articles, possessives or verb forms are missing or incorrect. Practise building accurate subject–verb sentences first, then add subordinate clauses and check sentence boundaries.

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