Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Many people from the contryside are moving to urban area's so less population is left in rural area's.It is believed by one school of thought there is severe decrease in the population of rural areas. I disagree with this type of development for a range of reasons.

To begin with, why i diagree with this point of view? The first reason is that if people of countryside start migration towards urba cities then who will sow seeds and crop fields. People living in that areas are basically farmers. There work is to sow seeds and lookafter the crops. If they do not do their work then from where we will eat. Many things are grown in the ground.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a clear negative position in “I disagree with this type of development” and give a relevant reason: rural migration could leave fewer people to grow food. The question is therefore addressed, but only minimally. The single point is not developed with explanation or a specific example, and the response does not consider other consequences or build a fuller argument. The opening also repeats the idea that the rural population is decreasing rather than establishing a developed line of reasoning. The response is 118 words, below the required 250, so it cannot provide the depth and support needed. To strengthen it, explain the effects on food production and rural communities, add a relevant example, and develop a second reason supporting your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some basic organisation: an opening gives your position, followed by a paragraph introducing a reason. Phrases such as “To begin with” and “The first reason” signal that you are starting an argument. However, the response does not progress beyond this one point, and the sequence within the paragraph is repetitive: the questions about who will sow crops and where food will come from express essentially the same concern. Connections between ideas are also sometimes unclear, as in “It is believed by one school of thought,” which does not clearly link to your own position. Use separate paragraphs for distinct reasons, explain each point in a logical sequence, and use referencing and linking phrases to show how each sentence develops the argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a small set of relevant topic words, including “rural areas,” “migration,” “farmers,” “crops,” and “population,” so the main subject is generally understandable. However, the vocabulary range is limited and several choices or spellings make the writing less clear or natural. For example, “urban area's” is not the correct form for a plural, and “lookafter” is written as one word; “sow seeds and crop fields” is also an awkward expression. Repetition of “people,” “areas,” and “work” limits precision. Build a wider range of accurate phrases for discussing rural economies and food production, and check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise vocabulary would help you explain your argument without repeating the same basic terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple sentences and a longer conditional structure, such as “if people of countryside start migration towards urba cities then who will sow seeds and crop fields.” This shows an effort to express cause and consequence, but the range remains limited and the longer construction is not controlled. Errors include missing articles and prepositions (“people of countryside”), subject–verb agreement (“There work”), and sentence boundaries, as in “areas.It is believed.” Capitalisation is also inconsistent, including “i.” These problems recur and sometimes make the reader pause, although the central meaning can usually be understood. Practise accurate sentence patterns for conditionals and cause-and-effect explanations, and proofread articles, agreement, punctuation, and capital letters.

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