Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing this is positive step toward developement

firstly people are moving from countryside to cities due to this opens up doors of opportunities as they move to cities this provide them comfortable life and they can meet different people from different background.furthermore this also help to increase literacy rate of younger generation because of very popular education institute for example one who lives in cities have more chances for earning and competeand fo progress in this digital world and develop skills like time management different social interaction skills compare to one who lives in rural areas he has less opportunities he spend more time without work which limits earning and compete the modern world

secondly city life is more helpful in difficult situations such as accidents we can get first aid immediately education is more approachable work there are huge work opportunities the water and severage system is very reliable in urban areas .

there is less load sheeding in cities there are more chances we can compete world

in conclusion moving to urban areas is positive development as it helps improve countries economy and development.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You clearly take a position, stating that rural-to-urban migration is positive, and you give relevant reasons, including access to education, employment, healthcare and reliable services. However, these points are mostly asserted rather than explained or supported with specific examples; for instance, the claim that city life improves literacy is not developed with evidence or a clear explanation. The response therefore addresses the task only partially, with ideas that remain limited and under-developed. The required minimum was not met: the response contains 185 words, and the 20 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Develop each main reason with an explanation and a relevant example, and write enough to meet the task requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some basic organisation: the response gives a positive position, introduces reasons with “firstly” and “secondly,” and ends with a conclusion. These signposts help the reader identify the main points. However, the ideas do not progress clearly within the body paragraphs, and several points are crowded together in long, loosely connected sentences. For example, education, earning opportunities, social skills and competition are combined without clear transitions or explanation. The repeated use of “this” also makes some references unclear. Use separate paragraphs for distinct reasons, connect each claim to its explanation, and vary linking expressions so the organisation feels less mechanical.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, such as “opportunities,” “literacy rate,” “first aid,” and “work opportunities,” so the main message is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or awkward, which sometimes makes the reader work to understand your meaning. Examples include “opens up doors of opportunities,” “competeand fo progress,” and “less load sheeding.” Spelling errors such as “developement” and “severage” also affect accuracy. Aim for precise, natural collocations and check spelling carefully. Replacing repeated general terms with topic-specific language about employment, public services and rural access would make your argument clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts to express reasons using both simple statements and longer sentences, but the range of structures is limited and complex attempts are often faulty. For example, “this provide them comfortable life” has problems with subject–verb agreement and article use, while “he spend more time without work” also has incorrect agreement. Several sentences run together without appropriate punctuation, particularly the opening sentence and the long first body point, making relationships between ideas difficult to follow. There are also incomplete or unclear constructions, such as “due to this opens up doors.” Practise building accurate sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use full stops to separate complete ideas before attempting longer structures.

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