Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In majority of countries around the world, people are migrating from villages to urban area, due to which population in rular area is falling. It can be positive and negative developments whereas according to my opnion, it is positive developments due to a fact that in cities their many basic facilites such as hospitals, schools, parks, and more jobs option.

As in urban area there are like facitites, so many people moves toward cities to provides best eduaction to their childrens so that they could achive their goal in life and during the emergancy they can easily access the hospitals, while many people dia in village because hospitals are far away from their home or due lack of road network.

Additionaly, in cites there is high chance to have job or work for skill workers and un-skills workers like job in IT company, haspitals, petrol pumps, ride the cap and can also work as labours in differents projects. Cities also has lage option of parks for children and playground and other entertainments options.

While they village miss, fresh air, healthy food, open environments and relatives meanwhile people moves to cities for better future for them and their children.

In conclusion, i would say that a eduacted socity has lead to devlopments in a city, nation or country and even around the world but as it is responsibility of governments to povide all the faclities that are avilable in cities should be provided to poples in rural area.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear overall view that rural-to-urban migration is positive, and you support it with relevant points about education, healthcare, employment and services. The example that villagers may struggle to reach hospitals helps explain the healthcare benefit. However, the discussion of disadvantages is only briefly acknowledged through “fresh air, healthy food, open environments and relatives,” without explaining their effects. Some supporting claims, such as the range of city jobs, are listed rather than developed with a specific example. The conclusion introduces a useful qualification about governments improving rural facilities, but the response does not fully explain how this relates to your judgement. The response is also three words below the required minimum. Develop both sides more fully and make the final position explicit in relation to the drawbacks.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, paragraphs about city benefits and rural drawbacks, and a conclusion. The ideas are generally relevant and the reader can follow the main argument. However, progression is uneven: the paragraph beginning “While they village miss” is very short and does not explain or connect its list of disadvantages to the argument. Linking expressions such as “As,” “Additionaly,” and “While” are sometimes used mechanically or do not clearly show the relationship between ideas. The first paragraph also combines the position and several reasons in one long sentence. Use clearer topic sentences, develop each paragraph around one main point, and connect examples to the claim they support. This would make the overall progression more consistent.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “migrating,” “emergency,” “road network,” “skill workers,” and “entertainment options.” These choices show an effort to discuss education, healthcare and employment rather than relying only on very basic terms. However, the range is limited and many spelling and word-choice errors make parts of the response difficult to read, for example “rular,” “facilites,” “eduaction,” and “haspitals.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, such as “ride the cap” and “large option of parks.” Aim to learn accurate topic collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise expressions such as “access healthcare,” “employment opportunities,” and “public green spaces” would help you express your ideas clearly and naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a reason clause with “due to a fact that” and a sentence explaining why people move for their children’s education. However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences hard to follow. For example, “many people moves” has incorrect subject–verb agreement, while “in cities their many basic facilities” has an incorrect sentence structure. There are also problems with articles, plurals and verb forms, as in “a educated society” and “people moves.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation need attention, particularly in the long opening sentence. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with correctly formed clauses using “because,” “while” and “so that.”

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